So, I'm thinking about redoing this whole story. Because there is SO much more that could be put into it.
For example: Have Rainbow Dash fall for you over time instead of instantly
Having Cloudchaser play more of a part in the story
What do you think?
Also leave suggestions in the comments about adding to the story
And If you want to be the editor/proofreader for it, just let me know (winkey face)