So I went through my prologue and read it over again taking the critical comments into consideration. I completely understand the comments I received about my initial narration. After going through it I picked several lines that made me cringe. I now know what not to do when it comes to narrating. I shouldn't be using the narrator to make jokes or call the punchline before it happens. I wanted to think of it of a parody of sorts but I guess it felt more intrusive to the story then