Twilight has gotten several visitors at her home for a 'conference' of sorts between the various peoples of her world and beyond. Zecora represents the Zebras, Ember the Dragons, Thorax the Changelings, Gilda the Griffons, and Sunset...represents Sunset herself, with a perspective granted by her time on the other side of the mirror.
Great strides in understanding are made, as discussions take place, and Twilight documents it all. Cultural touchstones are exchanged, traditions are shared, and most of all, new friends are made, while old friendships grow stronger. Things are in fact, going far better than one would expect.
That makes Luna suspicious. Things simply do not go this well when dealing with foreign powers, in her experience, and as she waits for the other horseshoe to drop, she decides to be proactive, and has five of her best Nightguard bat ponies do a bit of surreptitious observation, using her magic to make them all but invisible, just as dinner time rolls around.
This was an idea I had kicking around inside my head for a few weeks, and with the assistance of Shrunken LittleBro12 I was able to make something of it. He and I co-wrote this in a sort of Round Robin fashion, each taking over where the other left off, see if you can tell where the trade offs happened.
Oh, special thanks to Autismo555 who helped with the editing of the piece, and here's hoping you guys like it.
Tagged Teen for Unaware Macro/Micro interactions, including body explore, being sat on, and vore stuff. Please Read before you rate.
Legend of Zelda: Majora’s Mask
Hope they didn’t cross the streams
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Heh, both my ideas
Third paragraph.
Altogether, there are tons of typos, like missing dots or commas.
I liked this story, but there's quite a few things that could use editing. The biggest example I can see that needs editing is that Shadow Stealer and Chitter seem to switch genders multiple times. I think Shadow Stealer's supposed to be female and Chitter a male, but that's a guess due to these errors. Here's the worst example I can find.
There's some other things you may want to edit.
Unless she put the sky in a folder cabinet, that should be "filled".
That should probably be "onto".
I think that should maybe be "bonds".
Whatever gender Shadow's supposed to be.
"thought".
And lastly, I think you're missing a word between those two.
Had lots of fun writing this.
When the summary said she'd turn them invisible, I wasn't expecting a micro vore fetish story.
So... I'll just go to the other end of FIMFiction now. Good luck with your... stuff.