During a really bad storm, Twilight is forced to let Rainbow Dash stay with her, the only problem being that the two have been drinking and now they are getting closer together, Also I added OC characters because i thought it would help with story progression, which i think it did.
Tracked before reading... Twidash ftw
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ja,ja, me to
Cheers
~iraqlobstah
Teensy bit rushed but a good start, a few grammer and punctuation errors are there, but over-all it's fine.
P.S. if you need a beta reader let me know!
Slow down a little bit, you aren't going to run out of words. That said, aside from the usual grammar and spelling errors of a rushed writer, this seems interesting.
Kinda rushed but still worth reading. Moar chapters plox
171175 BEHOLD AS I KNOW HOW TO STOP A ZERG RUSH WITH MUUUUUUUUUUUUUUFFFFFFFFFFFFIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIINNNNNNNNNNNNSSSSSSS
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Well said, this was my reaction as well. A promising start, all in all.
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Huh... ya know, this ain't a bad read at all!
I'm eager to see more!
I really AM eager to see what happens next!
i wanna KNOW NOW WHAT HAPPENS
This just got interesting!
awwwwwwwwww so cute
can't read anymore to cute go on with out me
Dream sequence anypony?
This is where my mind went at the thought of Twilight and Rainbow walking home drunk.
192465 You are now my friend, that's exactly where i was going with it.
devilblade demands more MORE I SAY
266437 *waves hand* you'll wait til my writers block goes away
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To amazing! im hooked on TwiDash
I am working on it.
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Need a chisel and hammer?
Otherwise, good work!
Holy mother of all that is twidash
This is definitely a fav and follow
Need more, this is gonna be, SO AWESOME!
I promise that this will be the shortest chapter for this story, and I hope you all haven't died from waiting so long.
If I have any complaints at this time. it's speed.
Slow... down... the story will progress, just make sure that the characters get developed properly.
Oh, and a bit of grammar issues, like... paragraph spacing and such. I"m very forgiving when it comes to proper word usage and punctuation, but I find a story nearly impossible to read if there isn't proper formatting.
other than that, this seems like it could go wonderful places.
I would complain about story speed or about the length of updates BUT I have absolutely no room to talk after what I'm doing with my own story. Not to mention that I love this story and think that the occasional short chapter is good for setting the mood.
Looking forward to more, D.Blade out.
Yeah, little complaint about the speed of the story, buuuuut, as you are writing and I am not I have no room to argue
But I like where this is headed all the same.
This is what I would call a "mini-chapter", where it helps to move the plot along but has no significant value
I'm being serious when I say that I had immediately smiled like this after reading:
As the mass amounts of other people have said, slow down. But seriously, a good read, thanks for it.
Oh, you know it, Twilight
I just want to know.... Is the title a Final Fantasy IX reference?
PLz finish i love it