After Rainbow Dash is sent to Cloudsdale High Boarding School she finds things a little trickier than she thought. Fortunately she meets a certain yellow filly who shares her love of music.
Projecting? Me? Never. this is a Flutterdash fic taking place in the filly years. (In this case meaning high school age.)
Teen rating just to be on the safe side in case of suggestive or naughty language, nothing major though.
This is my first fanfic so please be kind but if you notice any spelling or grammar mistakes please do tell me.
I do like this so far! Seems like a promising, sweet little story. And well, FlutterDash! All my yes. It'll be interesting to see Rainbow and Flutterhsy's lives as high school fillies.
1419150 Thanks, I'm glad you liked it.
1419434 loved it
Not many spelling or grammar issues, good on you
I did find a double space once. Not that much of a big deal but here:
Between "High" and "Boarding"
Anyway, nice start, interesting, sounds promising. I will be watching this
Take five moustaches:
And give me MOAR
1420395 Thanks for finding that. I'd hoped that I wouldn't miss anything but in fairness it was written at midnight on a mad inspiration. I'm glad you liked it and I hope to have the next chapter up soon.
1420424 By the way, I placed this in the Flutterdash folder in the Shipping group.
1420436 Awesome! I didn't know you could do that, but awesome none the less!
1420459
*mane
Nice story!
Dat disclaimer... AGREED!
We need to buy the show! NOW!
i.imgur.com/j4Nnv.png ~Wolf
diu vivere in lupus imperium!
1420459 I have a few more groups to add it to ^_^
1420568 Sounds great, the more who see it the better.
1420588 No problem!
I always hate it when fics aren't properly grouped ;-;
P.s. check your page, you got a watcher ^_^
i.imgur.com/j4Nnv.png ~Wolf
diu vivere in lupus imperium!
1420620 Is that why I kept feeling like I was being watched while eating lunch? *Glances over shoulder*
Poor Fluttershy, she just can't catch a break. Mmm, I wonder what Rainbow's thinking of, as well as that song...oooh. O: Still, there was quite some d'awwww to go around!
I haven't spotted any mistakes, although I do suggest adding an apostrophe to Shy, making it 'Shy since it is part of her name. But I guess it does work either way.
1421860 I'm glad you didn't find anything major. As for the whole 'Shy versus Shy thing, I've seen it done both ways so I'm really not sure.
And yea I am being kinda mean to poor Fluttershy in this story...
1422171 I've seen it done both ways, mostly 'Shy. XD So yeah, I guess you can say it does work either way!
Poor thing...but that's okay, she doesn't need our protection. XD
1422171
You're adorable
I am the KING of being mean to Fluttershy. This story is heaven in comparison - you've got nothing on me.
Having chuckled at you thinking you're mean to Fluttershy for a while, because I know nobody who has beaten me in that regard ever, I finally sat down to read this, and I like where it is going. I like it a lot.
Your characterisations of Dash and 'Shy are really sweet - Dash is pretty much right on the money, and 'Shy is really good too.
Interesting - I do hope you expand on this. It's an intriguing idea and could potentially lead to some decent story.
Heh. Not crying. I know that feel, RD - I DEFINITELY didn't cry my first day of school. (This is high school, but whatever. )
I get the feeling this is well-used - a very nice bit of detail.
This part had me chuckling. Go, Fluttershy! Push! Don't waste your time in school~~!
You have an incredibly way with words. Her optimism here shines, and I really like that she puts on a smile despite feeling very much the opposite.
Makes sense - her racing track in 'Sonic Rainboom' was pretty much that, and also it just totally suits her.
Oh wow... this part... just wow. I love it so much.
I imagine 'Shy WOULD quite like that - not feeling like a recluse would only strengthen their bond. Nice touch!
Country Fluttershy... I can see that. I like it!
Heck yeah! Finished chapter 1!
I want more, but I am so tired it's not funny. I'll be back to read Chapter 2 later.
- MS
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No errors! Congrats!
P.s. I'm availible 15:30(3:30PM) to 22:00(10PM) on weekdays. (9:00 to 23:00{11PM} on weekends)
It is 3:44 for me right now ^_^
i.imgur.com/j4Nnv.png ~Wolf
diu vivere in lupus imperium!
I think it should be "spent"?
I think it should be "too"?
Anyway, it UPDATED!
But I can blame school and loss of internet connection for making me only able to read this now.
So, I'm supposing a lot of time has passed between these chapters? Nice. I like their interactions. I also like the song bits
Fluttershy's eye confuse me. Sometimes they're like:
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But sometimes in the show, they're bluer. Observe:
If you watch only Fluttershy's eyes...
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In the show, they are still often coloured more like the above picture.
Fans seem to prefer the less-blue-more-green-ish type eyes.
Still, I agree with your statement. they are not green. They are TEAL! TEEEEEEEAAAAAAAAAALLLLLLLLL!
By the way, author:
1423207 Thank you so much. *Squee* when I set out to write this I didn't really expect many people to read it or enjoy it. I'm so happy you all did and... well just thanks guys.
1425175 Yes, yes that should be spent. *Facehoof*
1422958 Oh you just wait. I'm not done being mean to her yet...
Right there, just a slight misspelling of Dash.
Gentle, but close!
That's about what I found so far. Overall, this was so sad. How utterly cruel of Rainbow's first friend to just do that. I know that someone admitting that they're gay CAN be shocking, to be sure. But to react in such a way is just terrible. I mean, honestly? It's just about no different if you're a girl and then one of your guy friends confessed that they were in love with you. Meanie Cherry.
But at least now Rainbow was brave enough to tell Fluttershy about it, and that she was there for her. It's just what she needed.
1426783 And both mistakes are no more! Thanks for spotting them. I did feel a little guilty while writing that bit. Oh well, at least it ended happy right?
I actually felt kinda guilty about that plot twist as I had to go back and change something in chapter one to facilitate it. I always intended to have that in the story but I realised after writing it that I hadn't laid the groundwork very well.
1427279 No problem, always glad to help! Hee, at least it did end nicely at the moment!
That's okay, it happens all the time. XD I think we all have gone through that and still do!
Ahhh the sweet, sweet calm before the $h!t storm... just kidding... or am I?
1422958 Hang on. You're the one who wrote "Hearts Aflutter." Yea, you are WAY better at being mean to Fluttershy than me... hooves down... without a doubt...
Awwwwww... How sweet! When it comes to FlutterDash, just about any angle in the "confession" approach can be done very well. Here, it's so cute. I guess Rainbow was indeed falling in love with her but was terrified at first, at least until she knew she didn't have to be afraid. Because Fluttershy not only is an understanding pony, but she feels the same way! And how cute that Fluttershy made the first move! D'awww....
xD Oh crud, that means it's only going to get worse off from here. Oh well. I shall endure the journey!
Hee, I love how Rainbow Dash was so smart. I like that, it shows she's smarter than we give her credit for. And I think she is, I really do.
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Fluttershy*
Fluttershy*
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Fluttershy*
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resumed*
Fluttershy*
Fluttershy*
That error was made so much...
i.imgur.com/j4Nnv.png ~Wolf
diu vivere in lupus imperium!
1429280 Meh, what can I say? it was one fifty in the morning when I wrote and proof read this... sorry about that.
1428645 Yea, I like to think she's smarter than we give her credit for. Believe it or not, that bit where she corrected the teachers grammar was something I did in class once. I just thought it should be in here cause it was hilarious.
1429531 Hey, that's awesome! Good one!
Wow... looking back on this chapter I'm really unhappy with the way it came out. Maybe I should delete the bit where Rainbow Dash gets in to a fight with the bully... thoughts? Oh well lesson learned: don't write and post at midnight...
Ugh... I promise I'll do better next time.
1429791 After a bit of editing I am much happier. Amazing what writing after a good nights sleep will do...
I love how quickly you update. Sadly, because I'm so busy, I don't get to read new chapters until a long time after they've come out. Ah well, it's still great seeing that this has updated, even if I know I can't read it at that moment.
Anyway, this chapter was sad . But it was awesome
It kinda reminded me of the fanfic "Rejection".
Corrections:
Drop it, Fluttershy.
Forget the quotation mark at the beginning.
Capitalize "when".
Now, these are some issues with commas that do not necessarily have to be corrected, as I suppose they aren't as obvious or major as others:
I think it should be "I'm so sorry, Shy.
I think it should be Oh, she was everything I wanted and more.
I don't think there should be a comma after "started".
Great chapter.
1430781 I've never read "Rejection" I'll fix those up right away. You were, of course, right on every one. That last one is because sometimes I forget to put a ... instead of a comma. I hope you get time to read chapter four soon.
WHERE ON EARTH DID THE BLOODY COOKIES GO?
WHY ON EARTH IS THIS STORY SO BLOODY ENTERTAINING?
So... it's finally happened. I thought the duet was a nice touch.
Rainbow sad. When's Rainbow's sad, I'm sad. And so is Fluttershy. Heh, sorry, Had to say that. So, I think you meant Rainbow said. Now distinctly more awake than she’d like to be, Rainbow said hopefully,
Capitalize Miss.
Now... Moar!
1431405 I don't know why but the phrase "Rainbow sad." amuses me. (Sadist)
I have to admit I'm happy. You should see the list of errors spotted on my fist publishing of this chapter...
Oh and I'm glad you liked the duet. I wasn't sure about how it would look written down, I kind of just hoped people would look up the song on youtube and listen to it while they were reading that bit.
1431908 WELL!
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But THIS IS ALL FAKE!
BECAUUUUUUUUSE:
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1435568 Much as I hate to say it, the look on her face after I've finished the chapter I'm working on at the moment will look more like the eighth one...
ihum, I see what you did there. Terry Pratchett strikes again. Thus was a good book, one of my personal favorites.
1443699 I feel no guilt for this shameless theft as I credited him in the disclaimer.
Yay for Terry Pratchett!
I found this unbelievably entertaining. Now you have no choice but to give me more.
1443751 I'll be working on that when I don't feel like passing out from school... Hopefully soon...
I'm glad you found in unbelievably entertaining.
DON DON DON!!! The tension rises! Excellent as usual, keep up the good job. I can't be bothered to go round and pick up grammar, so, MORE!
1443782 My word, has it actually reached the point where people are sick of correcting me when I get something wrong?
And yes, the tension doth riseth...
1443799 No, I'm just lazy.
Yay, update!
I've read almost every FlutterDash fanfic, LitP HFtF is no exception ^_^
Okay. I'm late to the scene here. This has some parallels to my fillies story (except that here they are older and Thud is awesome).
Very very good start. I really wish they were canon :)