In the magical kingdom of Equestria, Rainbow Dash, the brave and daring pegasus of Ponyville, finds herself caught in a whirlwind of events after saving a royal family of unicorns from a brief accident. As a result, the royal sisters decide to make her a princess for their brother, causing her life to take an unexpected turn.
Will the prince be able to win her heart, or will the special bonds she shares with the charming Soarin determine her destiny? With the weight of responsibility and expectations on her shoulders, Rainbow Dash embarks on a journey of self-discovery, where she will confront her true feelings and must make decisions that will define her future in the kingdom of Equestria.
Interesting.
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Thanks, I hope you like the others
Seems potentially interesting, but there's one recurring oddity, which is that there are hyphens surrounding the dialogue marks. For example:
The prince, with a sleepy yet charming smile, rubbed his eyes with his hooves. - "Why always so early, Blooming?" - he managed to say loud enough for her to hear through the door.
The hyphens shouldn't be there, and it should instead read:
The prince, with a sleepy yet charming smile, rubbed his eyes with his hooves. "Why always so early, Blooming?" he managed to say loud enough for her to hear through the door.
There's also some cases where commas or periods are omitted from dialogue; this isn't an uncommon error, though, and is less noticeable. Still, FIM Fiction has a good explanation of said tags and action tags here which explains the punctuation for them.
Other than those I don't really see much of an issue in the writing so far, though.
Hello, I thank you very much for the instructions, I will take them into account for later, I do it this way so that the dialogues can be differentiated from the thoughts, in later chapters this is going to be seen, so it's more to avoid such confusions.
I'm learning how to write in English so that's where I'm going, thank you very much and I'm glad to know that you find the story interesting
hahaha I liked this Pinkie Pie reference
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Oh thanks for noticing hahaha
love the cover pic
I wish you good luck Aster
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He's going to need it
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Thank u so much
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no problem! And PLZZ continue, this story has too much potential
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i know right *winks*
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Yes of course, I plan to upload chapter 7 this week, Thank you very much for your support
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you are welcome
Your cover is amazing!
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Thank you very much
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Thanks for your advice
The story is getting more interesting. I can't wait for the next update.
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Oh, thank you very much, of course, I will try to make time to update it more often.
Great job the story is starting to get more interesting
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Thank you, I truly appreciate your words and support.
Is this based off of another story? I swear, I’ve seen this premise before...
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Hello, not really, I am executing the idea at the request of the user JBlaser
I love the art work it really help to gwt an idea of the whole look