Have you ever woke up in the middle of the night and felt uneasy? In the quiet of night, when everyone is asleep, and the world is dark, what could be going on in those shadows that surround you as you lay in bed? What could have caused that noise downstairs? Did you leave the door open? Do you dare get up?
Rarity wakes from a bad dream in the middle of the night, only to find herself feeling that the nightmare isn't over.
"in all honesty, I always figured Opal would be the death of me, I just wasn't expecting her to be so honest about it"
Always knew that cat was a fucking asshole.
Delightfully creepy, with an outstanding buildup and a macabre ending! Well done!
just how bright is it inside her sleep mask?
Twofer! Missing word (just what in her bed) and typo (room instead of roam).
I assume this is a typo, but if you are going for creepy cat antics (i have not read to the end yet) this could be a brilliant 'fake typo'.
guessing that you mean rationale?
I saw that.
Delicious.
prove
Breath here, not breathe. And, argh, typos during the tensest part! But, props to Rar' for having the sense to jump out the window. A helluva lot of horror stories would have happy endings if somepony had the sense to jump out a window!
Doh! I should have seen this coming when i praised Rarity for jumping out the window. You got me.
Huh?
Final comment: Great tension in there, i'm confused as to what happened to Opalescence. But i assume that you leave that detail to the imagination on purpose. Hooves up.
(i hope this doesn´t double-post, FIM seems glitchy this evening)
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Thanks for pointing out the errors. I have a bad habit of not polishing stories til after they're published.
Glad someone caught the Raven reference. And yep, Rarity just had to go back in for her cat. Glad you enjoyed the story.
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Definitely went Goosebumps with that ending. Glad you liked it.
If she's anything like the cats I know, all she needs is a good chin scritchie and she'll be harmless.
Rarity:Ah, I had forgot it was that time of the month Opal. Don't worry. Mommies gonna clean you up.
All cat owners know that their cats are one missed meal away from eating them.
Bit of a late review, but just wanted to say i really liked this one, partially just for being an E-rated horror story. I've always been a big supporter of "horror for kids" and it's nice to see some of that in this fandom.
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Yeah, I think I had Goosebumps on my brain when I wrote this. Glad you enjoyed the result.
I reread the story after seeing your comments about Goosebumps. I barely remember reading those stories when I was young. The ending makes more sense now! I wish Fimfic had more E-rated horror one-shots like this.
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I'll be honest, when I started writing this story, I had no idea what I was gonna do. Then the idea for the twist came to me and I was like 'yep, we're going Goosebumps with this'.