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great start so far
What's Star Eater?
This is already getting good
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It was an old fic about a guy transported to Equestria basically as Dante from DMC with the powers of Avatar and Naruto that was deleted along with the account to be rewritten without any MLP
A shame honestly, it was a really good fic
Hope that cleared up any confusion friend
His attitude is too much like a soft spoken discord mod to enjoy. Seeing someone use “M’lady” unironically just took me out of it.
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Oh god I see it lol
Don't worry, I wasn't planning on using it beyond that initial interaction anyway
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Yeah, but the gentleman Style speech is a good change in pace sometimes. In my opinion at least....
Into my library you go!
This a very good chapter. You misspelled the word two , You had the letters backword.
Thanks for the update!
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It's still going on royal road
Thanks for the update!
Thanks for the update!
Overall, decent but rough in some areas.
This is a lot longer than it needs to be and the second mention of surprise could be replaced with the word 'strangely' or 'oddly'.
Besides that, the character curses a bit more than I'd like. The first 'what the' could have trailed off there and given the cursing more effect.
Too much cursing and it tiring quick.
Last thing, the sword is ridiculous in size. I know it's your story, but that person sized sword just doesn't seem to work with the rest of your character's description.
Now two thirds his height? Fair, that's a greatsword. Fits better, but I understand not everyone will agree on this.
That's it for this chapter, hope I helped.
Or it could they could visually similar like most species.
Unless you're an expert on these animals, it's hard to tell the apart.
Don't know if I'll continue reading, came for ponies not humans/elves. Sorry.
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No worries, I knew this story wasn't going to be for everyone's taste when I started writing, it's alright if you don't like or enjoy it, that's why it's called an opinion
And thank you for your criticism and for pointing out a few discrepancies as well, if you do end up reading further, point some more out to me and I'll have them sorted
Have a good rest of your day/evening/night friend!
Love this story so far. Nice job on it, hope it continues.
How closely are you using the Star Eater story as a ref? Also I still have it downloaded as an epub, strangely enough...
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Initially, I had only intended it to have similarities, but after getting the original Star Eater from a friend of mine and reading over my story so far, I realized just how close to the original it is
So I'll be going over what I have so far and changing a couple things
Real enticing synopsis you got there... I'll come back to this and read it tomorrow, its 4am and my brain is letting the intrusive thoughts fade away.
Thanks for the update!
Overall decent start so far, I'd point out the few spelling and grammatical mistakes I saw, but it's a huge pain in the ass on a mobile device.
I'm glad you didn't make him instantly OP, despite being very strong.
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Tell me about it, I've been having so much damn trouble trying to correct any mistakes I come across at work but it just does not work
And yea, while this is a bit of a power fantasy for me, I didn't want to make him to be super powerful out of the gate as I thought that would be cheap, uninteresting and wouldn't allow for growth (both character and power wise)
Glad you're enjoying it so far
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What is the Star Eater story and where can I read it?
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What is the Star Eater story and where can I read it?
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There are two versions of the story, the original version and the remade version
You can either read the remade story here:
https://www.royalroad.com/fiction/36492/star-eater
Alternatively, you can get a copy of the story from this thread: https://www.fimfiction.net/group/205425/displaced/thread/465308/anyone-know-what-happened-to-star-eater
Be warned, the original is 150 plus chapters while the remade version is a staggering 550 plus chapters and still going strong. They're not quick reads and take time to get through, but I would recommend.
Happy reading friend!
Fascinating. And impressively disturbing.
Interesting, though I feel like commiting violence for you having him explicitly step on and smush a book you heathen.
Pretty interesting. Immensely entertained to see Miss Collector referenced.
Yep, this is neat.
Interesting. Felt like a bit much, especially how Celestia and Luna appeared to have been rather sidelined despite being among the most powerful, dangerous, and experienced beings on the planet. But interesting.
Very reminiscent of the Insect Glaive from Monster Hunter, using the winding sweeps and fluid strikes of the weapon, along with being able to vault yourself into the air, to avoid attacks or cover ground faster, made it one of my favourite weapons.
I get his reasoning here, who'd want to reveal themselves as a clueless nobody, with battle instincts, and the capacity to learn more quickly in battle, when you have so many, looking to you for hope and guidance.
Here's hoping Percival doesn't get crushed under all the stress entirely, and do a Twilight! He seems to have a few friends to rely on already, and that's all you need sometimes...... right?
As someone who has read "Star Eater" by Von(even got my personal OC put into that story via the old Patreon ) which "Of Blood and Aces" is inspired by, I've got to say I'm liking what I've read of this story so far.
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Star Eater was by far my all-time favourite and was the first fic I ever read when I was introduced to the fandom, so I wanted to homage to it through my own story.
Awesome that your OC was put in the story
Glad you're enjoying the story friend!
tinnitus is vary annoying. If you are someone that has no idea what it is or sounds like be glad because is can drive you insane. I'm lucky to have a mild version of it but I know it will get worse over the year's. Oh how I'm not looking forward to it... ironically my hearing is bloody fantastic overwise
Nothing quite like being dumped into the world by an uncaring god only for it to go "Shoot I new I forgot something!" Returning 10 minutes later and chucking a sword at you like a meteor, watch you curl into a ball and shrug "ah he'll be fine!" And leave
Ok I'm seeing a lot on game reference/crossover. Still can't place the sword the closest is the rune sword welded by War. What I'm really confused of right now ignore the literal ghost is the fact it sounds like are protagonist just fought the god of prophecy baldur of all bloody thing!
And if it is I don't think he's quite dead yet
Well, you said to point out any mistakes and I just realized that our main character has been getting hungry and eating as if he needs food. If I remember correctly, back when he first started out in the everfree forest, he said that he didn't actually need food. Did something change? Do I need to read more to find out why or how? Just food for thought I guess.
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It's more of a force of habit kinda thing
Even though he doesn't need to, he'll still eat now and then to take his mind off something, or because it's offered, or he plain wants to eat something
We will see this less and less as the story progresses but for now, he'll eat because his mind is still getting used to his new bodies needs
Hope that answers your question
Man I loved Star Eater when it was on this sight, so when a friend recommended this one to me, I got pretty excited
So far the story's pretty good
Got high hopes for this one, looking forward to more
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Owt?
This is a very good chapter. I glad that you updated this story.
Honestly this is better than I expected. With how strong he is I wonder what will popup to make all that strength necessary also new weapon unlocked
God damn that house is ridiculous
I see that Red vs Blue reference, now that's a throw back
I really wish he stayed out from under the boot heel of the Princesses and remained solo, but it is what it is I guess...
I fellow Sabaton enthusiast I see
Oh interesting, makes me wonder how it'll come into play
What's Star Eater?
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It was an old fic that was deleted to be rewritten on another site
You can look through the comments if you'd like to read either the original or the remade version, I've posted links to both
Hope that helps friend