Guided by the teachings of her mentor of Twilight Sparkle, Luster Dawn sets out to form her own Friendship Company – a group of diverse, lovable characters, each with their own unique personalities and strengths. Together, they navigate the ups and downs of friendship, facing challenges, and learning valuable life lessons along the way.
Ok while I'm glad to see somebody do something with Luster Dawn, seriously that plot was just dropped by Hasbro and a lot of fans in the end, while I think it could be interesting it's kinda choppy I counted about three or four paragraphs that repeated themselves and Luster just going off in a random direction on a Jorney of discovery can be interesting you have to have more reason than that it's just a little hard to get behind at this point.
Don't you mean young adult creatures since not every body are ponies and also nice to see those kids while adults becoming teachers themselves
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Don't you mean claws since she's a hippogriff
hello all.
i read your comments
i agree with all of it
(i do have a habit of repeating myself)
so i pretty much rewrote the school of friendship scene
hopefully its better this time
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thank you
Wait a minute her friends are here where are they
Okay this is actually a pretty interesting start of a story and having luster Dawn going on a journey and even traveling with her friends at least that's what you're trying to say but anyway it's always nice to see luster Dawn ever since the last problem and she really didn't have any more stories after that so it's nice to see her again going on a journey I wonder how that will work out for her guess we'll find out next time
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fixed.
i need an editor but cant afford it