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Jesus man now that is away to follow up a story well done mate it was brutal and very well done can't wait for the third chapter
Nice chapter dude we can already see the zipped sent into madness can't wait to see your next one
Nice chapter dude very a moshanol
This is a very good story. I love sprouts characterization!!
I really hope that sprout is getting framed, and that he's able to make some more friends!!
Damn there was a good chapter can't wait to see what happens next
Yes!! So happy to see more of this good story!!
I'm so glad Hitch is thinking about sprout, and not just keeping him out of his life now.
Can't wait for more!!
Well, crap!!!
This is not gonna be good!!
I really hope they don't wrongfully jail Sprout!! (I believe he is one hundred percent innocent)
Now then, as to who the murderer might be, I have no idea. But I know it's not Sprout!!
Can't wait for more!! I will be patiently awaiting updates!!
Wholesome+spooky+gruesome=a very good chapter
Crazy theory sunny is the killer and she is framing sprout as revenge or sprout mother because who else could get that evidence and she's only supposed business trip
I think you did well with the nightmare sequence.
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I know this is a theory, but this is Sunny we are talking about!?
Well, what a chapter!!! Zipp came to blows with Sprout, and got hurt as a result.
That's definitely making sprout look bad, even though he was just reacting to her grabbing him.
Can't wait to see what happens next!!
Great chapter mate so when sprout hit zip with that be self-defence because she tackled into the ground first anybody know?
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It would be self defense. Zipp may be working with the law as an investigator, but Hitch has not officially deputized her. She has no authority to conduct an arrest or to use force against a suspect. Also Sprout currently is not a suspect, just wanted for questioning which is different from an arrest.
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So in that case wouldn't zip be charged with a aggravated assault or would it just be regular assault
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Would depend on the location where the assault occured, the intent, severity of the harm and if some instrument was used to inflict. Where I live a slap on the arm would be assault but hitting someone's arm with a monkey wrench would be aggravated assault.
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So in that case what about zip grabbing sprout then tackling him ?
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The grab would probably wouldn't qualify as assault, just unwanted physical contact, unless it caused pain with intent to harm and it only seemed to freak Sprout out. The full body tackle is hands down aggravated assault.
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So that would mean zip would be breaking the law and therefore need to be dealt with accordingly right I know this is MLP and we really should be heading real world laws and stuff but what do you think the punishment would be just us spending the night in the sheriff's office jail or whatever
Hoping this story is still going! ^^
Excited to find out who the killer is
Dear Faust i cried reading this.
It was more emotional than i thought it would be when you warned us.
I am praying that Sprout ends up okay by the end of all of this. ANd maybe able to get a marefriend or something after its all over. Faust he needs it.
Good luck with writing!!
Great chapter mate worth the wait and I also create it I hope sprout comes out clean by the end of this
I wonder if you take anything from a long discussion I had with the other country about the rules zip broke and the consequences or did he plan that's from the beginning shrug???
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I have a plan for that. All I can say is…stay tuned.
Jesus Christ, what is wrong with everyone in Sprout's life? Two times he's revealed he's suicidal, and both times the other pony reacts with "How dare you, don't you care about how that makes ME feel?!". Well boo-feckin'-hoo, it's not about how YOU feel, it's about Sprout and how his life doesn't seem worth living to him anymore. You don't get to decide that, he does.
At least Hitch came to realise he was being a selfish ass, though I'm worried and a little disappointed that nopony actually thinks to sit down and really talk with him about everything. Even the pizza parlour ponies were more interested in themselves over Sprout.
How about an apology between Zipp and Hitch?
Sure, and Sunny and Sprout.
I'm usually very, VERY when it comes to stories like this, because... let's be honest, most of them tend to turn out to be terrible. And this story right here isn't exactly flawless. I'd say The Great Derpsby 's comment brings up an excellent point, for example. But you what? This story is still exceptional, and I'm definitely looking forward to more.
Well done.
*Claps loudly*
Well done!!
I look forward to the next chapter!!
And happy new years eve!!
Well, this chapter was an emotional roller-coaster, and I like it.
Looking forward to reading the rest next year!
What a great way to start the year. I'm anxious to see Zipp's development and how she herself falls into madness. I hope your friends can save her.
Um, I see you like Sprout and Izzy's Ship which I also love so... good luck with that.
I love this grim plot and I hope you'll keep writing it since you've left me "hooked" on it.
I also like Zipp x Hitch.
Who would have thought this sprout
could knock zips block off in such a fantastic way happy New year to everyone and this was a great chapter keep it out mate
Nice!!
I thought it was going to be his dad
Welp, certainly didn't see that coming.
Good twist and nice chapter.
The plot thickens.
I was tense throughout the entire chapter, afraid what would happen if it really was Sprout. I really didn't see that twist coming. Can't wait to see how this will turn out.
I'm also interested to see how Zipp will get over her prejudice against Sprout now that her ego has taken a serious blow.
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Indeed. I was so tense as well
So that... went better than I expected. Nice twist in the end btw.
Nice chapter mate and with a twist indeed so I'm giving a guest to the name of our killer is bloom or some kind of plants
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Dude I thought it was going to be his mother damn there goes both my suggestions of who the killer is out the window
A Brother?
Seeds Cloverleaf?
Nice chapter!!
Sad to see the fallout coming from the video.
Very sad.
I look forward to seeing how this story goes
Awesome to see Hitch kick some ass this chapter! Hell ya!
)
Also, Dang... Hitch and Zipp are gonna need some time to clear the bad blood between them. Let's hope they can forgive each other and work together in the end.
And Phillis. Oh boy. She has some explaining to do. This is gonna be interesting.
I hope Sprout's gonna be okay, and that Izzy can cheer him up with her care. (and perhaps a kiss
Not trying to be the annoying grammar nazi here, but I feel like the word 'shame' is repeated too much in this section of the chapter. I would suggest changing a few so that it's not as noticeable. Perhaps you could use words like: disgrace, self-disgust, self-reproach, abashment, chastise herself, degraded, chagrin, and the like. A thesaurus might help you.
God, Hitch is an annoying ass in this story. What do you want? For her to talk, or to listen? Make up your mind already. It's the same thing with Sprout, Hitch is only really busy with himself in his head and he needs to get over that. Like when he plans to have the thugs booked for as long as possible or when he blames Zipp for something she didn't do herself ("And now you unintentionally caused two ponies to commit assault on that same pony." means "You didn't do it, but I blame you for it.")
That's a thing, though, nobody seems to be willing to actually listen to what the other party has to say. I even feel for Zipp Storm, because yes, she jumped to conclusions and she did something horrible and she needs to face the consequences. But she did blame somepony who had already tried to murder her once(!). All of Sunny's group need to get their heads out of their behinds. Especially Hitch.
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Yeah, asking someone a question and then saying shut up is kind of stupid on Hitch’s part.
And that reason for arrest might be flimsy. I’m no law expert.
But I think this lack of proper talking is kind of meant to be intentional.
Will this come up later and have the others (minus Zipp since that’s already happening) called out on it? I don’t know.
I have a very bad feeling about what this line of dialogue is implying.
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Same.
It's not good. Not good at all
I was wondering if this would come up. Hopefully things don’t get too ugly from this.
Great Update! This story is really getting interesting. I really hope Zipp and Hitch get to reconcile with one-another at some point.