High school bully Sunset Shimmer has only just begun straightening herself out, when she makes a startling discovery: Magic is real!
With notes to learn from and an anonymous letter addressed to her, she begins to investigate strange occurrences at her school.
What she finds is more than she bargained for, for better and for worse.
Alright, I am currently at the second chapter and find the story so far interesting, although it was confusing for me at first what exactly was going on, especially with the bully part since Applejack seemed not reluctant to be with Sunset, but with the second chapter it's now clearer to me.
Nonetheless, I like the idea of not "the" Sunset Shimmer and the EqG characters being introduced to enchanted objects in that style.
One thing I noticed:
Must be strangle
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Right you are! Must have missed that on the last read-through. Thanks for the heads-up.
And thanks for reading.
I like how you've characterized Pinkie Pie here. Her randomness is both an advantage and a hindrance to the other characters, as it should be. Her antics are a bother, but not annoying to read. She's weird and hyper without being straight-up nuts. It adds to this chapter.
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I'm really glad to hear that, since Pinkie is the one I think about the most in terms of writing.
Though it's the next chapter where I really hope I got her right.
I liked that chapter and all the small objects coming to live and our heroes defeating them plus them getting now the new abilities. It didn't feel rushed for me and the flow was good ^^
Jumping props and balls would be noticeable, unless they did it during a time no one would see them. But otherwise I doubt that, even if no one saw them, after showing off their own magic no one would believe them
Wow, this is a really good story, keep up the good work.
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Thank you so much! It's this kind of feedback that is the most motivating.
I'm really enjoying this story, and the fresh perspective it offers on these characters. I hope you're planning on continuing it!
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I'm glad to hear you're enjoying it.
I'm not entirely happy with this anymore, but I haven't abandoned it either.
My approach to writing has changed and I'm considering to either keep writing or to try again from the beginning eventually.
I'm actively working on other stories, but sooner or later, I will revisit this story, or something in its spirit.
So, I'm sorry to say, probably not too soon.
I have a good feeling who it might be, but I'm not gonna jinx it.
what she thought it was.*
Wait, did she make that flame from her bare hands!?!?
I'm guessing the Magic affected the outfit Rarity made or her fabrics that ended up attacking Sunset?
under the needle.*
Ok, maybe it was the sewing machine that did it.
Sure explains everything.
Why am I not surprised thos was gonna happen.
No turning back now.
You had it coming Pinkie.
That explains things...
Welp, the magic is back!
Something tells me she's gonna be screwed if the mascot gets destroyed.
https://m.I don't blame Fluttershy for feeling that way. Seeing something like that must've been scary as hell. I'd probably react the same way she felt.
Just what they needed.
That was... odd?
They work at the same place I'm guessing?
So then she's currently in her junior of senior year of high school?
This reminds me of something similar a fimfict friend of mine did for one of his stories.
Exactly, she's turned over a new leaf.
it... So,*
The first one likely, second no.
And like AJ said, everyone deserves a second chance.
But it's getting worse now!!!
At least she's not to seriously hurt.
Sure must be a lot to handle.
Not surprised.
Patience is often the key for many things Dash.
Wow...
Looks like Dash got her wish.
How is this protecting!!!!
Better than nothing i suppose.
I think it would sound a lot better if it said 'With Rarity behind her' over 'With her behind her' that just sounds odd.
Wait, so Trixie was behind it all!!! But, how she'd get them to be all enchanted?!?! And how did Flitter and her sister become vampires!!
Probably best not to ask.
Oh no... it's the alicorn amulet!!!
Woah!
Where'd the handcuffs come from?
straight jacket.*
I wonder who those 2 mysterious people were?
She should've destroyed it!
had been a bad dream.*
Guess there's no cure then...
I'm not sure when this story will continue but I do want to see more of this story. And if Sci Twi might appear. I mean, it wouldn't make sense this story has the Main 7 tag I feel it's just Sunset and the human 5. Still, hope to see more of this in the future.