" Limestone's a great employee. I just wish she could train Yona without me needing to hire a carpenter every week."- Headmare Starlight.
The Young Six are a blessing to this very earth
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Well that's one way to end a story.
Great stuff!
smoothie good
story good
That's actually a really nice story I mean despite the swearing And I think this Interaction between Yona and Limestone is pretty nice but poor limestone She really is stressed out about this whole thing but I guess she's really dedicated for a family that's cool but sometimes she needs to find her happiness like what Yona said Sure it's gonna be hard but it may be worth it
Thoroughly good stuff
Tiling should be capitalized.
I'd advise a comma or period after "barely thirty ponies even went to that school".
Limestone*
When you're using the phrase, it's "yuk it up".
Wonderbolts'*
You're missing a space after one of the commas.
You have two bouts of dialogue from the same character with two sets of quotation marks. Either add something like "Limestone grumbled" between the two bouts of dialogue or only use one set of quotation marks.
Also replace the period after "story from earlier" with a question mark.
That aside, good story! I haven't really seen much of Yona in the few episodes I've seen of the show, but she looks solid. I particularly like your portrayal of Limestone. She's always a winner.
That last picture was glorious.
And congrats on getting featured too!
I love the insight into Limestone's character.
Why do I want to see more of then working out issues/legit wanna see yona bodyslam someone onto a mat lol
This was a fun slice of life. Liked seeing some attention paid to Limestone and the weight of the responsibility she must feel. Being the oldest on a traditional family farm cannot be easy, I imagine, and the glimpses we got of her in the show make me think most of her irritability is due to that. Yona was great too, supportive and stubborn as always. And the ending sketch was just hilarious. Limestone was going to town on that smoothie.
Another fun Student Six story from you!
Yona knows what's up. She's a great pal. Gosh, is everything you write just gonna be an underrated little treat like this? It sure seems like it.