[I want to get out there with you to help stop them] %73
"Fluttershy, are you alright?" Tali asked as the pegasus seemed to glare at the empty space in front of her, her rate of breathing starting to settle down a bit.
"Yes," she answered, raising her head to look Shepard straight in the eyes. "Commander, I would like to accompany you into the field on future occasions." She stated, her voice not wavering the least bit as she announced her intention. The room remained deathly quiet after Fluttershy spoke, none of the others had expected such a rash decision from the usually shy mare.
"You want to do what?!" Tali said, being the first one to break the silence.
"I want to go fight in the field." Fluttershy reiterated, "Commander, I could hear them scream in that vision, understood their pleas. They were all killed anyway, just like the reapers will try to do to all of us. I can't sit idly by and let that happen, none of my friends at home would do that either."
"You understand that I can't just take you into the field, right? You need armor, weapons, training with those weapons and a few other things before I'm willing to make that call." Shepard explained to Fluttershy who nodded in understanding.
"I know and I want to do it anyway." She said as she lifted her right foreleg and slammed it down again. Shepard silently studied her for a moment longer before finally opening his omni-tool and speaking.
"Joker, set a course for the Citadel." He ordered the pilot before turning to the others, "We'll drop you off at the Citadel along with one of us to get you the desired gear since we currently are out of leads anyway. While the Alliance Intelligence Service is trying to locate Matriarch Benezia, we'll have to do other things like investigating sightings of geth in the Armstrong Nebula."
"ETA to the Citadel is ten hours, Commander," Joker reported as the Commander finished talking.
"Good, that means you have ten hours to figure out who you want to have with you, Fluttershy," Shepard informed the pegasus, "You're all dismissed." Everyone except for Wrex and Shepard left the comm room and just before the door closed behind her, Fluttershy could hear the krogan ask Shepard for a favor. Deciding it wasn't important Fluttershy tried proceeding back down to the mess to get some food only to be stopped by a seemingly angry Tali.
"What in the world are you thinking!" Tali told the pegasus with a stern voice. "You want to go out and fight?!"
"Yes." Fluttershy simply answered, Tali tried sputtering a reply but couldn't as she was as stunned as she had been back in the comm room. Though Fluttershy wasn't going to back down now. "Tali, have I told you about Nightmare Moon and Discord yet?"
"That sounds ominous enough for me to want to hear," Garrus suddenly said as Tali and Fluttershy were made aware of the fact that the turian had been listening in on their conversation. Fluttershy's stomach started rumbling, reminding her that she hadn't eaten in quite a while. Garrus chuckled as he heard Fluttershy's rebellious belly, "Tell you what, we'll get some food from the mess and you tell us your story."
Fluttershy nodded and followed the turian down the stairs followed by a grumbling Tali. Once in the mess, Garrus got three food packets along with a sterilizer for Tali and sat down. The pegasus started to tell the two of them about the summer sun celebration and how she and the girls had faced the corrupted alicorn. Tali seemed to get over her grumpy mood as both she and Garrus had plenty of questions about the events surrounding the summer sun celebration.
"So you and your friends faced a being that was able to move a celestial object?!" Tali exclaimed as she was leaning forward, trying to catch every word from the pegasus.
Fluttershy nodded. "It was either that or face eternal night. That would have decimated plants and in turn, hurt the animals."
"Keelah, you really care about your animals, don't you?" Tali said, amazed at the pegasus who nodded greedily, "Now you also mentioned something called Discord, What's that about?" Fluttershy grimaced at the thought of the spirit of chaos but proceeded to tell of their encounter with him anyway. By the end of it, both Garrus and Tali were staring at the pegasus in disbelief.
"Your planet sounds... interesting," Garrus said as Fluttershy finished her tale, "is it always that exciting or are there peacefull periods as well?"
Fluttershy giggled, "Before Nightmare Moon Equestria had been at peace for over seven hundred years, so no, it's not always that exciting."
"You never had to kill anything on one of your adventures, have you?" the quarian asked solemnly, cutting off any further questions Garrus might have had. Tali sighed in resignation, "I'm sorry I got angry at you up there, I just don't want you to have to go and hurt other people. We might not show it but It's something you'll carry with you your entire life." Fluttershy swallowed a lump in her throat as she started to understand why the quarian was so opposed to having her in the field. "But if you still want to go out there then I'll be behind you all the way."
"Thank you, Tali," Fluttershy sincerely said to the quarian as she was still willing to support her despite her objections.
"I'm glad you two got this sorted out but you should really be starting to think about who you're going to take with you onto the Citadel. I mean, have you even figured out what kind of armor you want? Light or medium armored or even heavy?" Garrus asked the pegasus who shot him a sheepish look.
"Uhm... maybe? Not really?" Fluttershy replied while guiltily clopping her hooves together.
Garrus chuckled, "Thought so, I for one suggest a medium armor suit. It won't impede your movement too much and will give you some decent protection." He suggested but Tali seemed to disagree.
"Medium armor will already be too heavy, she's not trained to carry something of that weight and it'll impede her flight. I suggest light armor with a focus on shields, I know Liara would agree with me." Tali argued.
"Though I'm sure Liara would have her focus more on biotics than on shields," Garrus countered, "But it's not our choice anyway, it's Fluttershy's."
Tali, in turn, looked at the pegasus. "So who would you like to take with you?"
1. Take Liara [Light armor, biotic focus]
2. Take Tali [Light armor, tech focus]
3. Take Garrus [Medium armor, ballistic weaponry]
4. Take Wrex [He might be a bit crude but I'm sure that with his age he'll be able to give valuable insight]
Rainbow Dash and Wrex worked well together in Gathering Storm and at the very least Fluttershy could use him as a shield.
Goodness, serious mode is activated, isn't it?
Before I get to corrections: a general rule you seem unaware of: How to deal with sentences referencing quotes:
If your sentence is directly referencing the quote, that is, if, and only if, the sentence is stating that or how someone is saying something, then these special rules apply. Otherwise, the rules are as standard.
If that is the case, a referencing sentence narrating the quote is interrupted by a comma and then continued within the quote. The sentence does not end! That means, the first word of the quote is not capitalized unless it is a name. Similarly, if the sentence referencing the quote comes after it, the sentence in the quote ends in a comma if it would have ended in a period. If it would have ended in an exclamation mark or question mark, it still does. Regardless, the sentence referencing the quote is, again, a continuation of the sentence within the quote. If the sentence narrating the quote interrupts a sentence within it, it basically acts as an insert. That is to say, the sentence in the quote begins and is interrupted by a comma, after the quotation marks, the narrating sentence begins lower case (unless it's a name) and ends in another comma, before, after the quotation marks, the quote continues, again in lower case.
Now that we have that out of the way:
New sentence: 'You need armor'
Matriarch Benezia, we will have to do
This is one of those rules I mentioned before: the sentence doesn't end after 'Commander' it is continued in the narration. As such, that needs to be a comma, not a period
Another one of those rules, the narration here refers to the previous sentence which was complete, as such it doesn't refer to the sentence starting with 'You want' and that needs to be a period, not a comma. Using upper case is correct, though.
Another one of the rules: In this case the narration has nothing to do with the quote at all, so again: period, not comma. Since 'Tali' is a name, it is, of course, upper case anyway.
this is just a case of a simple forgotten comma. 'started rumbling, reminding her'
and another one: 'Once in the mess, Garrus got
and guess what, another one: 'leaning forward, trying to catch
Once again, the narration has nothing to do with the quote. Period, no comma. Again, upper case is correct.
another missing comma: 'Tali said, amazed at the pegasus
Three things here: this sentence narrates the quote and 'the' isn't a name, thus it has to be lower case beyond that 'asked, cutting off any further questions Garrus might have had.' End your sentence there, don't build unending snake sentences.
again: the sentence narrates the quote, therefore the quote needs to end in a comma.
This sentence doesn't narrate the quote. Thus that has to be a period, not a comma.
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I was most definitely not aware of that rule, I'm going to try and keep a close eye on it in the future since punctuation isn't my strongest point anyway.
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Yeah, I kinda figured. That's why I pointed it out.
Without those last three words.....well, suffice to say I've been corrupted. n///n;
As for Fluttershy's class.....I'll admit, tough to call....
Garus is assault and support. He is a excellent marksman. And a tactician
(Gerrus) theres my vote
I want to vote Wrex because Wrex, but sadly, I am still playing catch up, and this poll ended ages ago.
Sorry, probably going to be a lot of comments from me. Not sure why Shy would pick a biotic based light armor, but okay. Thought tech based light armor was a good choice.
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Her body has an insanely high amount of Ezo saturation, outclassing the Asari the number one biotic users in Citadel space. As a pony it gives her, her flight, grip, ability to talk to animals, and the Stare. If she were to somehow be able to use a biotic amp like biotic users do then that is her best class.
Oh, you mean the jealous shunned mare having a temper tantrum, and the big friendless softie with far too much power?
That...that's not grammatically correct. "Things" and "seeing" should be swapped around.
And, I'm guessing destructive criticism is like salmonella? It leaves you feeling sick and drained for a while, if not outright killing your wanting to write?
Garrus has a point but Tali is also very well in her chose of recommendation. I think Fluttershy would be a great mobile sniper!
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Wrex a meat shield and a meaty lover perhaps...
Is the Genophage like a STD i wonder...
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It's s perfectly good stress release method
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And a damn fine lover for FemShepard
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Garrus
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Wrex romance would to be created full on by the Author. Would be awesome
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Ponys have more Biotics than Asari...
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Indeed. If Asari a Infantery than Fluttershy is a Tank. Guess Alicorns are Starship Dreadnoughts?!
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Twilight is a Unicorn so it didn't happen.. yet?
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I commented on every chspter once... Guess he become Chuck Norris now?
Biotic sniper, she is the most Ezzo rich individual in known Citadel space and fighting from behind from a elevated position? Outflanking the enemy will be also very easy!