This story is a sequel to The Hardest Goodbye
After deciding to run away to the Badlands in order to try and find his destiny, Spike encounters the old villain, Nightmare Moon. After an unsuccessful attempt to posses him, Nightmare Moon is now stuck in his head.
I’m listening
Nice start.
In the beginning there was a prequel
Attention captured… standing by for next objective (chapter)
Alert of coolness in overdrive!
Yes!!! This wasn't only a one off!!!
I would rather suggest to plan out the entire story from beginning to end.
Of course not all the details but at least so much you always know what will happen next. Otherwise you will quickly run out of ideas and this will turn into an dead fic. Happens far too often...
Edit: I had recently seen this blogpost regarding planning stories. Maybe you should have a look at it.
I suspect you are talking about "Home is for the Weak"
- MLP: FiM
- Comedy
- Random
- Slice of Life
The princess of the sun and a gimp orphan sit in a cardboard box.Last suggestion:
Maybe you should look for an editor/proofreader. While I enjoy your story so far there are quite a few small typos.
But I should probably shut up now.
Anyway:
Good story!
I'm curious what might happen next.
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Dude, you are awesome! You have no ideia of how much time I spent looking for that story, thanks a lot!
Perhaps I really should get myself a proof reader... Lemme just figure out how to interact with other human beings and then how to get one of them to be my proof reader.
Really? You're taking up residence in HIS head and you're demanding privacy? What privacy does he have from you? You can literally watch everything he does, listen everything he does, heck, you can probably see and hear everything he thinks, while he can't hear a single thing you don't want to say to him. Now, I'm not saying neither of you can have privacy, just that you should expect not to have any privacy, and that you should be learning to coexist as a single unit, which you arguably are, already.
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You're welcome.
Maybe this group can help you: Looking for Editors
(Or other, similar groups.)
Nice want more of this story.
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Soon, very soon... Maybe...
i can't wait to see whats going to happen when the princess find out the others didn't even know spike was gone!
and maybe and some romance between nightmare moon and spike?
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I suck at writing bruh. If I tried to romance this, it would turn out as one of those cliche romance anime that stall to no end. Now lemme try to revive my creativity and see if I can write something
Off to a good start I'd say. Also I see what you did there
I already love this
Spike + Nightmare Moon = awesome
I can already imagine all the worries she's going to endure when she finds the note hopefully this isn't going to steer towards a negative ending but I enjoyed this.
So......*pokes with stick*
Is it dead?
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*GASPS*
I LIVE
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Wooooooo ^^
You gonna try to finish it?
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Will sure try!
THEY LIVE!!
It’s almost like it has been years lol. But actually though, liking the story so far and the way Spike and Nightmare interact is quite nice.
Oh and congrats on being featured!👍
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wAIT WAHT
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Ask and you shall receive.
Good shit, even wonderful
Holy crap this is still going! Been years now but I still feel you make the interactions between Spike and Moony really interesting, hope you continue.
Yep it was worth it to keep this story in read it later and wait for updates
Just wait until he tells her foals are giving candy to her at Nightmare Night.
I can see that happen.
An update! Yay!
I had to re-read parts of the last chapter to recall what had happened before, but I believe I figured it out.
Anyway, good chapter! I'm curious to see what (mis)adventures this unlike duo will undergo next on their way to Fillydelphia.
Don't listen to the author Red Delicious, he may know writing but he apparently has a lousy sense off taste.
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Red Delicious tastes like cardboard, has the texture of ash, and a skin so thick and bitter that it might as well be my heart! Prove me wrong! I dare you! I double dare you!
Nice story, it's well written with Spike and Nightmare playing off each other pretty well
So is it that he never intends to return? Or is it just that he anticipates he'll probably perish at some point on his journey?
Will you update it?
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Probably not, sorry. No particular reason on why I won't either