It's been three weeks, three weeks since they came back from the camp, and Twilight's still shaken up. Not from the events, that's kind of become the new normal around here. No, she's shaken up for a different reason. True, she's no longer afraid of Midnight taking over again. But, now that she isn't constantly afraid, new questions have risen in place of the old ones, who is Midnight Sparkle? What does she want? Why is she still here? The mystery is confusing her more and more everyday, so much so, it's starting to visibly affect her. But the answer came from the person she never expected, herself.
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I like it. I think you should expand on it.
Sounds pretty good so far, can't wait to see what is next in this story!
7743531 Plan to, like I said, this is a teaser.
I added this to my very well written story book shelf because this has kept me on the edge of my seat wanting to see more of this wonderful work of art. You have done a very good job on this beautiful story.
7743944 Thanks, appreciate the compliment, spread it some more if you can. Sorry I couldn't write the whole thing in one sitting though, I didn't have the time. But I assure you, I will finish this story.
7743531 Mind spreading the word about this though? I want to get as much advice and criticism on this as soon as possible, I want to make it better.
7743531 Also, I noticed you like to write...dark stories. If so, maybe you should take a look at some of my other works, you might find interest, or even better, inspiration.
7744466 Love to but I do have a lot of your work already faved.
lol 
7752092 Have you already read them?
7752474 I have faved a lot of your stuff.
7753862 That...doesn't really answer my question.
7755720 Yes I have read them
7755920 What did you think?
7758218 Your a very good writer and I enjoyed your work. I wouldn't have faved if I didn't like it.
7759209 I was hoping you'd be more descriptive and specific, but okay.
Question: Why is this in the Oversaturated World group? The Oversaturated World group deals with a specific verse. This story violates certain aspects of that verse.
7763140 I second this. This has nothing to do with Oversaturation.
Well... This peeks my interest. A much better take then what I did. I'll keep my eye on this and I hope to see more.
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I third. This is not an Oversaturated fic.
You have a stray unclosed italics tag somewhere.
For your next story, please consider creating multiple chapters instead of posting and going back and editing to add more.
THIS WAS AMAZING!!!
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I actually considered the idea of Sunset going through a similar thing, but it would be a prequel to this. And was going to make a story of them adjusting to having a separate entity in their minds, eventually going to each other for help. But, this story was an impulsive decision. I don't normally do slice of life stories; It's more difficult writing stuff like this for me than what I'm used to. If you'd like, you or anyone else who wants to can write a sequel themselves; I would be perfectly okay with that. As long as you credit me for making the original when you do.
Aww, this is so sweet, Midnight Sparkle wasn't so bad after all, she was just scared and lonely and needed a hug
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If you like this I suggest reading Fake Smiles, it’s a bit more mature, but it’s good.
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So that one ends happily?
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Yes.
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Got it. Do you think your other stories might have endings that aren't completely downers, at the very least?
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Don’t know, working on that
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Ok, got it.
> The darkness is seeming to extend
seemed to extend. Keep consistently in past tense.
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thank.
Damn, this was brilliant! This is pain that I imagined Twilight going through and what should of been conveyed in the EqG movie. I loved how you portrayed Midnight Sparkle as the physical manifestation of Twilights loneliness and pain, because that is 100% true, and you cannot change my mind. I can't wait to read the rest of your stories and I regret not doing so sooner.
She's kidding... right?
Oh no!
Oh my!
would still be here.*
I feel like this won't help her and just make things worse.
Even if it was hard for her, I'm glad she went to Sunset for help.
Does Twilight live alone in this story/head cannon?
I'm pretty sure she doesn't have that many friends in Equestria.
and she just yelled at her,*
I understand."*
that I-"*
https://m.Even when times are tough, having friends by your side, will always make things better.
Despite the few mistakes I found, this would've been an epic addition to eqg. Even if it's fanmade, it does it's duty on what Sci Twi would've gone through post LOE.