Ever had a desire to stop being buffeted along by life, and just go back to the good ol' days?
A young entrepreneur is tired of the hustle and bustle and corruption of the big city and returns to his hometown in the country, hoping for a simpler, happier life...but although his personal battle for happiness is only just beginning, a certain family is about to become more than just his inspiration to fight on...
It's a.. so-so start. Not that impressive. Maybe your next few chapters will be better.
349417 Heh, I know it's a bit vague....but if I reveal too much about V's reasons to leave the city right now...it'll seem like I'm just repeating myself later in the story![:twilightsheepish:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/twilightsheepish.png)
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I always suck at story intros anyways
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It's something like a prologue? Well it's going either way to be a HiE or a PoE one... Good luck for the next chapter!
349438 Heh yep, more of a very extended story summary preview thingy (the original chapter title was actually "Prologue" but I felt that was kinda lazy XD; )
New chapter coming up in a bit!
And they WILL get a bit longer soon!
EDIT: it's up!
Chapter three is up!![:pinkiehappy:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/pinkiehappy.png)
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...Feedback is sparse...
Oh wellz!![:rainbowdetermined2:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/rainbowdetermined2.png)
*soldiers on*
It gets a bit more..in spirit of the show after this!
Chapter 4 is up!![:pinkiesick:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/pinkiesick.png)
Heh, hope I wrote the characters correctly (keeping track of the Flim Flam brothers is a pain!)
Things will get...interesting as Detective Pinkie Pie tries to solve the case of the disappearing Apple Family!![:pinkiehappy:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/pinkiehappy.png)
hells yea
It's as good as far as crossovers go. A very good plot so far and Applebloom suggesting they slash tires? Anyway keep up the good work.
Great job so far keep it up can't wait for the next chapter.![:pinkiesmile:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/pinkiesmile.png)
377755 Thanks!
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I've hit a bit of a wall on this one, but I've got the whole plot bullet-pointed, so it's really just a matter of fleshing it out
Stop stealing my time, college!!!
*shakyfist*
Damn those educational facilities and stealing time from the important things.![:flutterrage:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/flutterrage.png)
And in this story I especially like that fact that out of the mane 6 it's centered around Applejack. Cause Applejack is my favourite pony![:eeyup:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/eeyup.png)
378310 And I would like to thank you reading this story has given me some inspiration to do a cross over of my own.![:pinkiehappy:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/pinkiehappy.png)
387880 You're very welcome!
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Heh, AJ is my fave bu Dash is certainly a close second
It's like: I could see myself with someone like AJ for life, but I'd hang out with Dash in a heartbeat, idk
Heh, I'm just about past this wall on the chapter...I've never written nonsensically like Pinkie Pie speaks and it's....tough to say the least![:twilightoops:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/twilightoops.png)
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I shall prevail though!!!
Keep working on that chapter.
And like you Applejack is my favorite then Rainbowdash.
Who doesn't like Rainbowdash.
387984 Thanks for encouragement![:pinkiesmile:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/pinkiesmile.png)
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And you know what...I really can't find any Dash haters unless they're just plain anti-pony in general...interesting
388121 For that same reason I thought Rainbowdash would be the most popular. Turns out she isn't nowhere near. There was a graph on EQd a while ago showing the most googled ponies. First was Twilight second was somepony I can't remember. Third was Princess Luna. I think Rainbowdash was fifth and Applejack was one of the least popular![:fluttercry:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/fluttercry.png)
388121 http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=b1prPjy6s58![:ajsmug:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/ajsmug.png)
Just thought you might enjoy this song. I was listening to this whilst I read through your story.
388412 Aww WTF no love for AJ?!![:ajbemused:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/ajbemused.png)
Ooh, diggin that song!![:ajsmug:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/ajsmug.png)
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And it came out on my birthday!
390571![:ajsmug:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/ajsmug.png)
Coincidence I think not.
But I am definitely looking forward to the next chapter.
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and I can't believe AJ is one of the least popular. And to my count she only gets about 4 episodes in the whole series dedicated to her
These results please me. I always liked AJ but according to this i'm most like AJ.
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Good show! Jolly good show!
(Cookie if you get that reference.)
NEEDZ MOAR!
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It's so quiet around here...
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I'm... actually somewhat curious now, but I guess the hiatus will last until you finish Blue Angel?
I also find it interesting how so many people will follow a story and then not look at the author's previous work.
well if you want feedback, your characters are perfect i think, even if the Flam brothers are a pain to write, the first four chapters where a great way to settle the character of V, and the world he is living in, i think this story has potential i was sad to see it on a hiatus status, if you could it would be great if you find the chance to continue it.
on a side note i think you captured the exact feeling some bronies, me included get when they got to know the characters for the first time, i was in love at AJ personality, it reminded me that i´m not the only one out there who values honesty, so yeah good story, as soon as university lets me i will read your other stories, i´m curious as to how a story about air fighters and ponies go along so i will definitely read your Blue Angel story![:twilightsmile:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/twilightsmile.png)
1879448 That's very likely![:twilightsmile:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/twilightsmile.png)
2329662 Thanks!![:pinkiehappy:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/pinkiehappy.png)
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Heh, yeah, I kinda need to find some time to write out the rest of this thing, eh?
One word...
NO.
Just kidding... But don't even fuck with my Applejack bro.
I read it and was like![:pinkiegasp:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/pinkiegasp.png)
and![:heart:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/heart.png)
keep up the good work![:pinkiehappy:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/pinkiehappy.png)
But then was like
vary good story
When I was reading it I was like![:pinkiegasp:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/pinkiegasp.png)
and![:twilightsmile:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/twilightsmile.png)
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But than read more and was like
Keep up the vary good work.
4640192 One of these days I'll go back and finish this![:twilightsheepish:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/twilightsheepish.png)
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But thank you for the compliments nonetheless