One of the most violent and heartless inmates of Arkham Asylum gets thrown into the world of Equestria. Stuck in an innocent world he is forced to become its unwilling savior as more of Arkham's crazies arrive to cause mayhem. Along the way he meets a group of ponies that will try to show him the meaning of friendship and something about that yellow pony just won't leave his mind. And watch as something inside him slowly eats away at whatever humanity he has left.
Takes place before season 4 premiere
Chapters (3)
Very interesting, I like where you're going and I don't think I've heard of a Croc in Equestria story before, there are a few grammatical errors, namely the use if its and it's.
Its means it belongs to that person, it's means " it is", so when you say It's eyes were narrow yellow slits you're saying It is eyes were narrow yellow slits.
Other than that I think it's done just fine, keep it up
Okay, now I'm downvoting.
There are even more errors, the sentences are losing their structure, the beginning is especially jumbled and since when can Fluttershy detect evil?
Also it's spelled "Drawl" not "Droll"
This story needs help, because this really is an awesome idea for a story, but there are just too many issues.
Please do some rewrites, if you do I'm sure that it will get a lot more views.
Off to a good start, but you really should get a proofreader for your chapters to check for any mistakes.
i am very much enjoying this. please do continue
One typo - you wrote "piece" where I think you meant "peace".
Interesting... Please do go on...
3779733 I do admit I was up late last night so I expected the worst. Thats gonna be explained later.
Made sure to fix that and the 'its' problem I had with the first one.
Do you proofread? Maybe you could help me.
I like the direction your bringing it in so far, can't wait to read what happens next, but the folks here are right.
You've got some work to do regarding your grammar, I think it was going a little too fast with it as well.
Well, I enjoy it so far. Although I am curious, was Strange's device a disintegrator, or was it meant to be a inter dimensional portal? I'm curious because either way it's odd that an evil psychologist would have something like that. BUT, you need to get Croc to Equestria some way. And if you changed it to much we wouldn't get to start our story in Arkham which is always a great place to start.
3781612 Stay tuned my friend! That will be explained in time!
Hmm...honestly I'm not too sure how this will work out. But I'm curious to see where it goes.
3782103 Oh you rapscallion!
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I have to say, i like the idea. Some grammar errors here and there, and maybe a few small plot holes, but other then that, i really like this.
3788978 Plot holes? Care to explain?
3789079 Well, i understand Luna and Celestia being able to sense major evil entities - them being demigods and all that - but since when did Fluttershy get the evil-monster-radar, too?
3789141 I knew you were gonna go there. That will be explained later. I dont want to spoil anything so I merely ask that you be patient
3780624 I'm not sure how we could make that work, if you tell me how to do the whole "Proofreading" thing then I'll see what I can do.
3805273 You could send me your email address in a private message and Ill send you my finished chapters so you can proofread them.
Fluttershy sensing evil strikes me as odd, but it might be tied to her being an Element of Harmony, so it's not a real gripe to me.
Interesting so far. Keep it up.
Whens the next chapter?
FINALLY, A KILLER CROC FIC
Dude whens the next chapter?!
All I can imagine right now is them wandering in the darkness while croc is mocking them like
"I WILL FEAST ON YOUR BONES" or "TICK, TOCK, FEED THE CROC"
Imagine that voice all around you
Arkham asylum was a very good game, especially the croc moments
4021673 Same
I love that game. The boss fight could've been better but I love all of the Killer Croc moments.
4021710 yeah, arkham origins made the fight much more basic and less complicated than asylum
In asylum, you have to slowly sneak around on VERY sensitive boards and get goo from fungus, without croc trying to rip your face off, and then knocking him into a hole
In origins, you blow him up with a batarang while he's holding a large gas tank, then beat him into submission over a cliff
I would like to point out for reference that some versions of Killer Croc actually quite like cute things, and many versions are very susceptible to a good looking or sultry sounding female. he's also varied from extremely intelligent to just a hulking brute, but he's always had a fair amount of sense, he's smarter than many other of Batman's villains for the sheer fact that he doesn't leave his enemies in death traps, rather wanting to make sure that they're dead himself.
4021873 Thanks for the suggestions and Ill definitely keep them in mind.
You think Fluttershy can seance him through instinct or scent like Croc
(also good to see you having forgotten your fic)
Good story found it while searching hope you update soon
Great story so far! Croc is one of my fave Batman villains, closely followed by Mr. Freeze and Scarecrow
Watching intently
Was wondering when we'd get an update to this thing, awesome work man.
This is pretty good so far! I would love to continue reading this. The prospect of Killer Croc in Equestria intrigues me greatly and he is by far a favorite Batman villain of mine. I look forward to more.
~ Super-Brony12
This is great!
Croc is one of my favourite Batman villains, His backstory is one of the more tragic iv'e heard (even by DC standards) and he has been shown in the comic to react well to being treated as a man instead of a monster. So it will be interesting to see which side of Croc we will see more of in this story, the uncontrollable monster, or the mentally tortured victim.
loving it so far, Keep writing !
For fuck sake. It's been 36 weeks since the last update
Is that it?
Of course you had to leave this story at such a cliffhanger...
Hope to see this update at some point in the future.
Any chance Rarity might make Croc a suit? He looks good in one.
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MORE PLZ
Why did this story have to die
? It had such promise
OK I admit, I've seen some pretty good cliffhangers but damn this one tops my list, looks like it's been years since the last update but now I'm horribly interested in how croc handles this one. I know it's a shot in the dark but please mate, come back and continue this story, the potential in it is amazing and I'd hate to see a good story die
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Damn, what a cliffhanger and this hasn't been updated in years! Please author come back and keep writing, this has so much potential!
