SAPR - Rewrite Progress · 7:52am Aug 15th, 2020
The SAPR Rewrite has now covered off the entirety of the first two arcs, Sunset's rivalry with Pyrrha and the Jaunedice storyline. Some important differences from the original:
Sunset first meets Ruby at the dust shop where they both fight Torchwick. Sunset battles the man himself while Ruby deals with his goons; thanks to the intervention of Neo, Torchwick escapes.
In spite of Sunset being Sunset, Ruby continues to make efforts to befriend her on the flight to Beacon; however it is Pyrrha and Jaune who come to her aid and rescue Ruby from Weiss. The teams assemble in Initiation, but Weiss' team is now known as WWSR, although it retains the pronunciation 'Wisteria'. Dove has come to Beacon looking for his old friend Amber, while Bon Bon - real name Sweetie Drops - is a spy for a mysterious individual based in Mistral.
Ruby is able to get closer to Sunset than anyone else, and Sunset is nicer to Ruby than she is to anyone else, most notably when she spots Ruby's discomfort in the mixed-sex locker room and arranges for Ruby to special treatment away from all the older boys. As before, Sunset gets into a fight with Pyrrha, culminating in an actual fight with Pyrrha after which the two begin to respect each other a lot more.
The first year team leaders are sent out on an exercise against a small horde of grimm. Sunset, Weiss, Yang and Blake work together to shatter the horde by killing its leader, but need to be rescued by Professor Goodwitch from all the angry grimm around them. They are awarded 10/10 for courage, 5/10 for sense and that's probably being generous.
Jaune has been training obsessively to rectify his deficiencies. Unfortunately he's training by himself and isn't very good at it. Pyrrha finds out about this and offers to help him, but Jaune is too proud to accept and refuses, spilling his secret in the process. Cardin hears everything.
Sunset learns Jaune's secret, and challenges him to decide what he wants to be. She steals his fake transcripts but does not tell him she has done so. Jaune considers his position, and after some advice from Professor Ozpin stands up to Cardin. With the transcripts gone, Jaune's forgery cannot be proved and he is not expelled.
Sunset has her epiphany in the Forever Fall against Cardin, and the team goes to nearby hangout Benni Haven's for dinner after the mission. They pose for a picture with a fake stuffed beowolf named Fluffy. Pyrrha and Jaune train, while Sunset gives Ruby her mother's diary. Sunset sings Ruby to sleep, and then writes an apology to Princess Celestia in the magical journal.
Does the confrontation with torchwick and the white fang have been removed of just moved somewhere later?
And also, do the old chapters can be seen somewhere? It could be nice to compare with the new or if (sorry but it can happen) we like an old version better.
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The fight at the dust shop has been removed.
The old version can still be found at Fanfiction.net.
5336149
Thank you
Congrats on all the rewrites. I'm looking forward to diving back in from the beginning, and hopefully it will inspire me to actually write again. I need that quality kick-in-the-plot.
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regarding 5336139, will the FF.net be updated past the point of the riraitos?
Does this mean that you are fully finished with the rewrite? I've been reading the new chapters but holding off on re-reading the story until the rewrite was finished