9th May. Random thoughts, writing, music and pony. · 2:59am May 9th
It's sad to see pony wars still playing out 
FiM rebooted, and its creators have strong ideas about that
They loved the pony concept in their way, or they wouldn't have gotten on board
And if you enjoy the previous gens too, then that's great!
The criticisms that others have don't have to matter
Just the same as criticisms of MLP by people outside this fandom
Ryan George is tight!
Feeling unloved and ignored?
Then I have just the thing for you!
Thinking about other people for a change! 
(this is directed at myself. Ignore me 
)
(But was I aware of the irony?)
Just 7 adjustments in 10K words! I'm cradling the baby fic in my arms. I'm just waiting for the OK to leave the hospital and show it off to everyone :3
It's a shame it's a monster. I blame her daddy.
Hitch lives above the jail, and it’s Saturday morning, so there’s a bit of noise.
For a bad error, this is pretty subtle, but I want to highlight it. The clauses don't feel right, do they? That's because the conjunction doesn't work. But why not? Oh, yes the 'and' connects two completely separate thoughts, but they shouldn't be separate. It's the noise being made that relates to Hitch living in a jail, in light of it being a Saturday morning.
Hitch lives above the jail and, as it’s Saturday morning, there’s a bit of noise.
ARGH!
Said tags
“I thought… please never leave me like that,” she has tears in her eyes.
"Dialogue is weird," she said. English doesn't like the fact that "she said" is not a sentence. Said tags seemed like some arcane weirdness to me at first, but actually just reflect a parenthetical structure. If X = ["Dialogue"] then it would read: X, she said.
But the fun doesn't stop there. Because that parenthetical structure is easy to miss, and because a great deal of dialogue is said with description, it is so easy to put false said tags in. I read that sentence 11 times and didn't realise! Using the form above you can't say: X, she tears. Instead, the two things are just separate. It is clunky, though, so you might need to further adjust - there is clearly a relationship between the dialogue being said, and the presence of tears. Hmm what should I do? Well she is obviously saying X, with tears in her eyes. Oh. Wait.
“I thought… please never leave me like that,” she says, with tears in her eyes.
“Me, I'm fine!” he begins. "Actually..."
"X, he begins," really sounds like it should work. But... it doesn't. Begins isn't the right verb for a parenthetical saying of something. You have to write: "begins to say" here. Once I realised that, I recognised that then the only way is either to have clunky periods, or to just not cut up the dialogue, like that. It is difficult to overstate how little "begins" adds to that dialogue. If he wasn't beginning to say it, then, um, how could there have been the dialogue in the previous line? 
“Me, I'm fine! Actually..."
Simple!
What's the needyometer reading for today?
Quite Needy
I am cute and fluffy and therefore...
Gimme Attention!
Sudden Shakespeare!
Love is heavy and light, bright and dark, hot and cold, sick and healthy, asleep and awake- its everything except what it is!
Sudden inserting of slang into Shakespeare!
Good night, good night! parting is such sweet sorrow, That I shall say good night till it be morrow. Slag.
