This story gave a chance to learn my major failures as well as people pointing it out. I thought editing would work, but I learned otherwise. To those just now reading and liking this: Read Great Fandom Man or something else for the time being or keep reading this for the major plots in the new version.
I can assure you, the new story will suck less. I've got practice.
The new story will have the canon I typed about (that nobody will read) and will be worth killing this guy off.
Here a link to the new version, that will be valid when I can get the ball rolling.