This story is a fan-fiction of MLP:FiM. I don't own any of it. It belongs to Hasbro, etc, etc.
Don't sue. Seriously. That would be so uncouth.
First fanfic! Any critiquing would be great. I just wanna know where I stand.
Chapter 1
Today, I am being discharged from the Lunar Guard.
My name is Cpt. Crimson Moon and I am, sorry was, part of Princess Luna's Special Guard, commonly called the Lunar Battalion (members call ourselves the Luna-tic Battalion).
According to my mother, I was born during the coldest night of the year, in the middle of winter. It was 20 years before Nightmare Moon was defeated and Princess Luna returned, but before then, Princess Celestia had to keep Nightmare Moon's power in check by occasionally pushing the moon into the shadow of Equestria, plunging it into a grisly shadow that colored it blood red. I was born on the last Lunar eclipse since Princess Luna's return. That is how I received my name. However, I received my title a very different way.
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Luna's special guard was formed one month after her return. Initially, Luna was giver her own personal division of the Solar Guard by Celestia. But Luna wanted a division she could truly call her own. That was when she presented the chance to join this guard to any willing and able-bodied pony. Many, including myself, came to Canterlot Gardens in the middle of a nice summer's day expecting a job much like our Solar counterparts.
We were wrong. Incredibly so. In the first half hour, ¾ths of the ponies there had dropped out. Luna had us doing incredibly straining exercises of agility, stamina, and strength. After 2 hours more, the volunteers left were exhausted.
“Do not think the Lunar Battalion will be as cushy and simple a job as the Solar Corps. Just because my sister decides not to use them for more than mere defense does not mean that my troops will behave so.” Luna said in a voice much scarier than her Royal Canterlot voice at full blast. Many of the ponies left give Luna a wide eyed look.
Luna gave out a tinkling laugh. “For those that think we are insane, let us make one thing clear: Equestria does have enemies. Many don't believe this because my sister has been able to keep the peace between the nations through simple diplomatic relations. However, my Lunar Battalion will be the fail-safe for Equestria. Now arise my troops.”
We all rose from the ground hindered by our own exhaustion. Many ponies who could still breath uttered a “Ma'am, yes, Ma'am.”
Luna gave us a manic grin. “No need for that my ponies. We are the force that strikes in the night, the troops of complete silence, the ones that rain darkness on our foes while our loved ones rest their heads. Now retire to your chambers. All following training will be in the night.”
My heart was racing after the first training session. It wasn't from the exercise though.