This story is a sequel to High-Water Mark
Quicksilver, Misty, and Cloud Walker have been friends since foalhood. Yet as they age and mature, envy and obsession begin to drive a wedge in their relationship. Tension builds as tempers flare to the point of open conflict. A single unthinking act could destroy multiple lives.
This story is part of The Quicksilver Chronicles, a series of stories that follow the adventures of Quicksilver and Misty as they make their way through whatever fate throws at them.
Cover art by MagnusMagnum.
Thanks to my pre-readers OConnerGT-R, mikemeiers, and FionaF. With a special thanks to my editor EverfreePony.
Chapters (3)
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p.s. What.s the Unicorns C.M. ?
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I assume you mean cutie mark?
It's the alchemy symbol for Mercury, which is what he was extracting when he earned it.
I can honestly say that this story has vastly improved since the original draft I read a while back. The story flows far better than it did originally, and I never got bored once reading it even though it is well outside the usual genres I prefer to read. If I remember right the author was having great difficult with this story due to one reason or another, but it seems his work with the editor was done a great job at fixing most of the issues that were originally keeping the story down.
I do have a few highlights to point out.
In the first chapter I really liked the opening scene I quoted above. It's been a while since I read the draft, but I think this was altered a bit from what I originally read. If it has been altered then I have to say it did a great job at grabbing my attention since I do love reading or watching scientists experiment on things.
In chapter two it was great seeing Quicksilver and Misty growing closer to one another. I'd also like to point out that the confrontation between Quicksilver and Cloudy was very well done. It was already fairly well done to begin with, but it looks like there were some tweaks here and there to make it shine just a bit more.
I have to agree with something that was said in chapter three, which was that Quicksilver and Misty belong together. Honestly I don't see something like this done very often, or should I say done this well, but I do think these two characters work well together and having one without the other just wouldn't feel right.
In other words this is a solid entry into the author's adventures with Quicksilver and Misty. I do think the other stories that are on the horizon are a bit better, but this is still a solid story that should be read by any fans of these characters.
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Thanks for the positive thoughts on the story. And you're correct, this story has gone through a lot of changes. I can't stress enough the value of both pre-readers and a good editor in getting from a draft to something ready to publish.
Wait until you see the degree of changes in the next story...
I really appreciate the scene where Quicksilver is somewhat afraid of working in the lab again. Feels real. Just thought I'd note that.
The dynamics between the three main characters in this story are incredibly strong, and a joy to read. I fell in love with their writing.
The explosion felt very scary, as it would be. The motivations behind it were intense too, but well explained and exciting to read. I was invested the entire time.
I'm guessing Cloudy suffered from jealousy and maybe abit of race supremacy?
This has been another really enjoyable read from you
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Jealousy and some possessiveness. In a draft first chapter (that didn't make the cut) we learned that Misty and Cloudy (both being pegasi) knew each other long before they met Quicksilver. So Cloudy would have seen Quicksilver as the interloper.
And I wouldn't exactly say race supremacy, more like race separatism. He had a bad world-view, and it had a very negative impact on his behavior.
I'm glad you enjoyed it. Thanks for commenting.
I know people can look it up on the cover art, but a little description in the story about how the symbol for mercury looks like wouldn't hurt.
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Interesting to know what you think about this story
And so, your thoughts are no longer a msytery, little GTR
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Well, I am done with the reading, will write the review soon
Here your Review
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Thanks for taking the time to read it.
When i pictured Misty in my head while reading this chapter, I saw her having the same aggressively funny personality as Izzy from the G5 trailer.
Basically, I think it is a smooth story. But I was hoping for some more inner descriptions and surprises. Such as more details of how Quicksilver would figure out what he's feeling about Misty, and the process of Cloudy falling to the dark side gradually like Skywalker. (By the way, Is his name Cloud Walker or Cloudy Night?) At last, I wish that it can be more unpredictable, so you can enjoy the feeling of uncertainty. I'll appreciate it if what I've said makes any sense to you.
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Thanks for the feedback. I appreciate it. My writing has improved over the course of creating these stories. I imagine the early stories would benefit greatly from a full re-write. But I think I'm more interested in pushing forward than backtracking. All the effort of writing, pre-reading, and editing are better spent on creating something new.
Ouch. Good catch. Fixed.
I hope you'll find more of this as the series progresses, especially in the Dark Steel spin-off series.
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I suspect jealousy at first, the tribalism and hate came later.
You can has review!
Equestrian schools must have lower* standards of safety than the real-life schools I am familiar with if he was allowed to work without a fume hood with something that involved not only mercury but heated mercury (which would have increased the amount of fumes).
*Might actually be a good thing... too much over-emphasis on safety can impede learning IMHO. OTOH mercury poisoning is lifelong neurological damage if I am thinking correctly (I know it is the source of "Mad as a Hatter").
EDIT: I see mention of a fume hood in the next chapter for something else. Maybe you just left it out here for simplicity?
Well, this is a bit worse of a motivation than I was thinking it might be. Of course, just because he is a tribalist doesn't mean he can't also be I love with Misty...
Cloud be like "I guess I'm just not even in the running..."
Ah, that kind of incel. Shame.
Cute.