When tragedy strikes, Rarity is left devastated. Not even her friends can pull her out of a deep depression. What will she do to make things right?
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Written for the Rarity Not Garbage contest under Barcast.
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Rarity I don't think bringing sweetie belle back from the dead is a good idea.
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Be sure to check back tomorrow!
Dreadnought
Phillies
This is looking really promising! Favoring this.
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Thanks for pointing out my typo. I guess I didn't pick up on it because of the Philadelphia Phillies.
Dreadnought
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Glad you like it. I am to please.
Dreadnought
Will we find out what happen? How did sweetie Bell die at the camp?
Can't wait to see more.
"I'm BACK! but how? the Necromancer said a life for a life..."
"Spike did this".
"No it can't be , My Spikey Wikey?"
"It's Okay sis, really it is, Quit with the dramatics."
"But how? Life for a life..."
"Simple math really"
"Dragons live for thousands of years unicorns not so much"
"Spike made a two fer one deal"
"How's living for a few hundred and change?"
that's my boy...
"you know how long it took to get back home...?"
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an alternate of that would be celestia and luna, you know immortality limitless life energy.
It was alright. Don't have much else to say.
Although it bothers me that Spike completely disappeared in the last two chapters, not even being mentioned among the gathered friends. Especially since you'd expect him to feel a deep sense of guilt over helping Rarity seek the necromancer in the first place. Having that not even be mentioned is rather unsatisfying.
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Hmm.... Well, he would take it pretty hard, so the others wouldn't want him in the boutique. As for the last chapter, I have only one thing to say. Be sure to take note, for this is probably the only time I'll ever say it, so be prepared: I made a mistake. There, I admit it, I'm human. Now that I've gotten that out of the way, I'll never admit to making a mistake for as long as I live.
Dreadnought
Geez, that was really good! From what I've learned, it's very difficult to make a quality, bittersweet story in only a few thousand words. But you have done a good job of it!
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Mistakes are one thing. My point is that it feels like a plot thread was left without even being addressed, let alone resolved. Spike was the last one to see her alive, and yet we never even hear about how any of this has affected him. Had he not been in the previous chapter, it wouldn't be that big a deal, but as it is... it's hard not to be a little disappointed by it.
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There was lots I'd have like to addressed, but due to time & word limits (I could have gone way over 5K), I decided to focus on the loving act.
Dreadnought
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Don't get me wrong. I appreciate any and all feedback. I'm working on several other stories, so the more criticism and feedback I get, the better I can write going forward.
Dreadnought
10/10
Amazing story, thanks for it.
Generosity in it's purest form...Rarity should be rewarded Princesshood for this.
As beautiful as this story is, how does it have 673 views?
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Meant as a compliment?
Dreadnought
8969158 Yes, it is meant as a compliment. I was just surprised at the view count for such a great fic. It's one of the ones I go to when I'm feeling down.
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Thanks for your kind words. Though I tend to go to comedies when I'm feeling down. Shoot, now that I think about it, that may explain why I write so many of them.
Dreadnought
Oh no!
Uh-oh....
Rarity...no....
!!!
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So... I hope you enjoyed the story. It's so hard to tell from emojis.
Dreadnought
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I did, it was just so feelzy!
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Have you read my story "Deathbed Confession"? That's another "feelzy" story.
Dreadnought
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No I can’t say I have....
Oh shizzle
This is DEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEP. I could go on a full-blown lecture about this thing, but I guess that I cant. A blog, maybe?
Applejack is the solid rock. I love the fact that AJ is the only one keeping these three together, and is exactly what I would expect from her. This story is pure awesomeness, tempered with a sadness of legit grief. I love it.
Oh, god. this is just plain and simple great writing. a good, somber story throughout, and though brief, can have a lot of meanings derived from it. I could try to list them, but I think I'm just overthinking it. Still, I love it.
Love the Mario reference
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Glad you're enjoying the story so far.