Spitfire gets caught in a storm on her return from a vacation. Rarity helps in the aftermath.
Assembled from the slush pile of my writer’s notebook (a.k.a. related Q&S contest entries rearranged like a metamorphic rock) for the 2024 Wonderbolts contest.
I believe you want 'dry'.
I believe you will want to replace the "v" with a space.
...Who the heck is Katherine?
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I’m less mystified about how that one wasn’t highlighted by angry red squiggles than by how it got in in the first place. That’s a distinctly phoneposter typo, but this was written entirely on my Mac.
The inset for the note is a good idea; however, it could be improved further if you added a number to the text. I realized where the callout was pointing--towards the "kirin..." line, but it would be easier with a number.
Having seen (at least two, if there were more, of) the original speedwrites, I had a fun time seeing how you expanded and stitched them together to create this fic! In particular, I had not remembered that Spitfire's issues in what became your final chapter were due to her getting caught in a hurricane, so it hadn't occurred to me that the speedwrite centered on the hurricane might be a prequel of sorts.
I also quite enjoyed the new-to-me content, like seeing that glancing reference to Spitfire's rescuers expanded into getting to actually see the strange airship she encounters -- exactly why such a creation exists, or how it came to be flying through these particular skies, I don't know, but that feels like the sort of teaser that could be a story of its own someday, and it served its purpose as an intriguing mystery here.