Just another stormy night like any other. Why expect it to be any different than the rest? But that's the thing. I thought it was just another one of those nights, but I was dead wrong when I saw what was in my shed. A small, pony/human hybrid thing that I had no idea that I was going to become the adopting father of. This is my story.
NONOONONONOONNONOONONONONONOONNONONONONONONONOONONONOOO. THIS DOESN'T EXIIST
5478956 not this one. i have looked into vinyls scratch versions of mld, but this one is different.
5478936 what do u mean?
I mean that this type of formula is overused in the community. Yes, while we will expect clichés in this story, I seriously find it lacking creativity and/or a fresh story.
5478981 u dont get it. the way this story is put together hasnt been done. how many mld insperated stories have u seen where the character was an anthro? plus there are only two other v-scratch stories based off of mld but they went nowhere, but this one im not even sure if its gonna follow the same guidelines. i tend to make my stories as diferent as possible, but under the same general idea
5478988 kay....dont see what you mean by lacks creativity. this is just the start. u dont even know what CREATIVE ideas i have for future chapters.
5479003 Yeah, look. The first chapter is like a pilot to a TV show. If it sucks, which in my opinion it was, or fails to be original it turns people off. Now why I say original, is because this is basically MLD with a anthro pony. And with how many spinoffs and sequels there are to that, I cannot find this at the very most Original/Entertaining
5479018 Well i respect your opinion, but nothing is set in stone until we know for sure, so if the frist chapter wasnt what u had hoped, doesnt mean the whole story will suck
5479022 I will give it five chapters, as I believe that is go long a story should take to get settled in depending how it is. Best of luck writing this and improving on it.
5479030 omg i meant to say first not frist
The cover art barely depicts her as anthrofied.
Just because you have a unusual skin and hair color, doesn't make you anthro, and neither does having a horn or tail, no matter where they stick out.
In the picture, she is at best a human mutant, or an alien humanoid species, but not anthropomorphic .
For her to be anthro, she'd need to retain various attributes and visual properties that remind of her original species, such as a muzzle for example in addition to bend knees and hooves.
In a sense, the ponies in Equestria are actually anthropomorphic as well, if only vaguely, when we compare them to ponies from earth, because the Equestrians already feature various visual properties, that are rather human (binocular vision, expressive intelligent eyes etc), plus their bodily proportions are vastly different from a regular horse as well (size of limbs, general height, much less visible muscles).
Here is an example of a definite anthropomorphic depiction of Vinyl Scratch:
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Take note of her hooves and muzzle, as well of the fact that she has coat
fur, instead of simple skin.
The features on the Vinyl Scratch in this picture, that are supposed to be reminiscent of her being originally a pony, are too few to categorize her as anthropomorphic.
In other words she looks much too human to be called an anthro.
Hope I could help.
PS: Yes, I do realize this story's cover image pops up on Google for "anthro vinyl", but Is still technically incorrect. The vinyl scratch in this picture can barely be called anthro and more so a humanoid mutant or alien humanoid.
I mean really, since when does skin color and a horn make you anthro by default? If she doesn't sport a pony muzzle, ears and possibly hooves on her hind legs in addition, you wouldn't be able to tell what species she heirs from, and rather think of her as a human with mutations.
Hmm... I'll give it a shot...
5479160 sorry i couldnt find anything better for the cover pic. its really the only thing that seemed appealing. but i will search again. and i know what anthropomorphic creatures look like too. but thanks anyway, and i am sorry i couldnt find a better pic
Word of advice: don't start your fic with a huge info dump. Instead, weave it into the story. For example, instead of telling us that a character has blonde hair, you could describe said character's hair blowing in the wind, or have said character run a hand through his hair. Also, instead of telling us that a characters parents are dead, you could have a scene were said character looks mournfully at a family photo.
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5479645 eeeeyup thx for the advice
Very good job but please put more chapters...
5479798 yaaass!!
The terrible knock-off of the Vogonverse. Probably. Not.
5479860 wut?
5479864
Look it up. Maybe join it if you want.
5479866 ok
5479799 so please find an editor.
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WERE HOME!!!!
-SkullKing
5480412 yeah
5478981
5478988
no it's different
5482201 yeah XD
it was going perfectly... until "daddy" was wrote. In my opinion you definitely brought this on way way waaaayyyyyy too soon. But i can live with it, considering that this has been the first story in a while with a brilliant concept and brilliant execution of the story. Over the last week or so, I've been granted the displeasure of running into stories with a brilliant, fantastic, beautiful concept, created by... "bad," writers. (in the loosest sense of both the words "bad" and "writer" )
The most disappointing story i've personally encountered is in my "The Twilight Zone" bookshelf (loved the concept, hated the writing, it is getting a rewrite though), and i can happily say that this story is definitely not going to that dark little corner
5483900 thx. i kinda felt the same way too that she had called him daddy already. maybe i can push it to the next chapter?
5479160 you must be really fun at parties
5483931 yes, edit it out of this chapter and weave it into a later one, yes! YES!
5483949 haha lolz XD I'm glad you like it. it's rare i get a good comment from critics, but since how fast this story was being favorited I guess it was to eventually be expected. Srsly. in the time of five minutes i had gotten at least 20 favs
5483958 you deserve it man. or at least, you do in my opinion
5483982 thanks another good story of mine is my story called Princess Luna is in your bed.
5483949 Only when I'm drunk, or bring my house monkey with me.
5484072 XD
5484072 hm... i may actually invite you...
5484152 to what?
You got my dislike when I saw this:
5486011 I know i agree. im trying to find a way to move it out of that chapter
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5478988 5478981
Will you two haters please stop hating
5488554 lolz
5488554 Yeah, Thats right! Remember kids! Your Constructive Opinion Is nothing less than hating!
5494097 XD
Where did you get the cover art?
-_-.
is all I can say.
5530781 what?
5529764 from google
5529764 do u like the cover art? It doesnt really fit the fact that Vinyl is an anthro. well it kinda does since the only difference is that she has feet and not hooves in the cover art.