This story is on hold until I have more experience with other stories.
I was a normal guy, well as normal one can be as an orphan. I get up, go to school, met my master after school, go back to the orphanage, eat, sleep, and repeat. But now things have spiraled out of control, and after the death of some one dear to me I somehow get teleported via a lightning bolt to a wold full of ponies that act like humans and defy all laws of logic. I must find a way home before these girly horses, who are constantly shoving their girly shit down my throat, cause me to lose my mind.
If I haven't already...
I haven't found a proofreader or an editor but I did get some helpful advice which I put to go use. While the story isn't perfect it should be better than the first version. Downgraded the rating to Teen as there will be cussing and a little light gore once or twice in the future.