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Rainbow Dash gets the surprise of a lifetime when DARING DO comes to her house and asks not only for her but for the rest of her friends to go on the adventure of a lifetime! Rainbow is skeptical, of course, Daring's only a book character right? How is she here in real life? What's the purpose of this adventure? Will everything turn out alright or will they lose to the villain?
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I don't know what to think about it. I just got an impression that everything was happening too quickly and too easily, kinda like in dreams, if you know what I mean.
Could you please correct all this? I'm getting confused on where the scenes change and who's talking.
221467
Don't worry I will.
Inform me once you proofread it, okay? Will watch.
222686 No prob.
If you ever need a beta let me know.
230054 Oh please? I really need one bad. As you can tell by this story......my grammar is crap.
230453 haha no problem!
231441 Wooohooo
Drop me a message.
IT's still just feeling too rushed. Give more explanations, brake up the paragraphs. Have daring explain some things, I doubt that the Mane 6, as experienced and hardened as they may be, will be up to the pace of a constant adventurer like Daring.
238877 Okay!
I am impressed with the conveyed action in the story. The twists were twisty, but not too twisty. The feeling was conveyed nicely. And the epilogue was slowed considerably. I really enjoyed the tender moments. A 4.5 from me, and I will be looking forward to your next adventures.
~E.C.
238967 Thank you. I'm going to add details in now. Hopefully the third times the charm lol.
Well i am enjoying a bad ass looking applejack very much.
239001 hey umm if this story is compete why is it marked as incomplete
7673272 Thanks I've updated it!
The premise is sound, the pairing is good, but the story itself is honestly kinda terrible. Way too much bull about the poorly named, pointless statue.