Chapter 1
The Great and Powerful Trixie stood proudly upon a cliff high above a mass of mindless pony followers, her perfectly trimmed tail and billowing cape flowing in the wind. A small tinge of pity for the hoard below was quickly snuffed out by the realization that no creature could possibly match her excellence, it wasn’t their fault that she was just...superior. Flawless genetics and years of tireless practice had honed the ultimate conduit of pure unicorn power.
“BEHOLD!” she shouted, causing everypony below to look up in awe, “The Great and Powerful TRIXIE in all of her electrifying majesty has ARRIVED!”
An eruption of dazzling fireworks and lightning bolts lit up the night sky, followed by the thunderous sound of thousands of stamping hooves and cheering equines. Trixie illuminated the entire cliff face with a soft purple glow. The magical light accented her impeccable coat.
“Simpletons of Equestria!” She exclaimed, with her most powerful vocal enhancement spell, “The Great and Powerful Trixie is about to ROCK YOUR WORLD!”
Unknown to Trixie, the ground below her was weakening from the constant vibrations of the excited crowd below. Completely absorbed in her magic, she failed to notice the small splinter of broken earth creeping up the side of her earthen platform.
Right as she was about to reach the climax of her epic Ursa Major VS Dragon light show in the sky above, a massive shift jarred her out of concentration. Before she could even register what was happening, the entire cliff face gave way, cascading freely toward the valley far below. Flashes of her past flickered through her mind, as the ground rushed toward her..
***
She woke up, tangled in sheets on the floor next to the bed.
“Ugghh... Dammit Trixie!”, the purple mare glared down at her blue counterpart on the floor “This is the third time this week! Can’t we have just ONE night of uninterrupted sleep?”
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Trust you to write about TWIXIE.
Good job though, you got me hooked. XD
Haha that was pretty funny.
I laughed
You FOALS
How DARE you give this anything less than 5 stars!?
>>5
I gave it 6 stars. Because I can
5 Stars: Trixie made me do it!
I give you 5 stars just because you made me laught.
Now get working in the other chapters before I change my oppinion.
Yay. Trixie would dream about how Great and Powerful she is.
5 Stars! Because it's Trixie^^
>>6
I lol'd. I wish I could do that. ;)
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Anyways, it needs a bit more. I felt like there was something lacking. It's not like it was bad or anything, but it's not as good as some of the others I've read.
Short and interesting, of course it is worth 5 stars
Is there a continuation planned, or is this just a one-shot?
This was just a 300 word story event I did to test the system for him :p
ha ha. made me laugh. great for a 300 word story. 4.5 stars
Seth wrote a story? *reads*
Wow seth...
you got the first fic uploaded to this site.
I found the premise of this story interesting. It clearly shows a side of Trixie we rarely get to see. There is clearly a psychological issue that you have explored in this work that has required careful scrutiny on your part, for which I can only commend. While notable for its brevity, the story's ultimate impact strikes just as hard as any longer story I have read. The grand twist at the end is, by far, one of the most gasp-worthy in the pony fandom.
Your prose demonstrates an understanding in descriptive narrative, as well as a bold use of more vernacular phrases, such as "rock your world". This is uncommon in liturature of such high caliber, and I have only praise for your daring to explore such new territory.
I was a bit disappointed in the lack of description in some areas. For example, I would have liked to know exactly who every pony was in the crowd below. I feel this would have added to the atmosphere, and given us more of a sense of exactly who Trixie was attempting to impress. Also, you tell us there was a crack, but you do not give us precise details as to the crack's exact nature. How large was it in inches, for example? Where was it in relation to Trixie's hooves?
Also, you only used the phrase "Great and Powerful" three times in this story. I feel that all stories involving the Great and Powerful Trixie should always contain the words "Great and Powerful" at least five times. This gives the story more emphasis, and draws attention to Trixie's subtle inner need for attention.
With that said, I find this to be a superb addition to the pony literary collection, and hope to someday see a sequel. Perhaps next time you can explore the mysterious "purple mare" and her own psyche, and perhaps delve into her relationship with Trixie. I sincerely hope to read more from you, and wish you the best of luck in your stellar writing career.
It was you Sethisto, and your grand obsession with Trixie, that I've really come to like her character for all of the ten-fifteen minutes she got on screen. I've since joined her herd and have not looked back.
Great and quick story here but definitely worth it.
All hail Trixie!
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Oooh it's Seth! ^.^
Ha, Seth wrote a story I won't read because I'm writing my own!
AND THUS this was the first fic on ficfiction (probably)
How things change....
9052 I concur.
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We need to go deeper!!!
good, shaun, good
1 I am repling to comment id 1
My life is compleate
Seth, my boy, this is the story that all true bronies strive for!
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Thumbs up because it's Twixie and Sethisto.
Who can deny Sethisto.
OH, NO NO NO. TRIXIE, DON'T HURT ME. NO ONE CAN DENY YOU EITHER.
Let's just click this little thumb thing here and... yep, there we go. 150 likes.
I believe in Seth.
I believe in Trixie.
I believe this is an awesome story!
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PLEASE CONTINYA
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YOU AGAIN.
STOP READING MY MIND AND GOING WHERE I'M ABOUT TO GO.
Also, first commentable story. Number 9. 8 is broken and the rest don't exist. Good stuff.
959013 Deal with it.
DIS SHIT IS OOOOLD
>First legit story on site as of now.
>One chapter; still not done.
FFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFUU-
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Nice story. Short, funny, and in perfect fannon. I give it
and a 
Why did I read this? Because it is the first proper story ever posted on this entire website. Stories 1-7 don't exist and story 8 doesn't have anything in it. Congratulations! Wait a moment... This was created by Sethisto. And it was commented on by Knighty. Creators of Equestria Daily and FiMFiction united? Sort of?
...why the heck did I post this? Sethisto hasn't been on his account since the dawn of time.
The first story on the site....wat.
1 the first comment. HAIL.
This is the first fic. Therefore, reading and faving is mandatory.
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I was just thinking the same thing
Heh, pretty funny though. First one on this website i'm told
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9th, actually, but it's the only one left :P