Unicorns Twilight Sparkle and Sunset Shimmer are the star students of Princess Celestia but the almighty Princess has other plans in mind. She sends the two dragon companions, Spike and Jake to Ponyville, to oversee the Summer Sun Celebration but instead, the two will have adventures of a lifetime.
This seems really interesting, but the description confuses me a bit.
Do just Spike and Drake get sent to Ponyville, or do Sunset, Twilight, Spike, and Drake all get sent?
Oooh neat!
I know you used red-colored text to represent Sunset here, but since she was the only one speaking, and it was obvious that the one speaking was her, there really was no point. Additionally, red text is one of the hardest for humans to read for any length of time, since the eyes will naturally blur the red letters together.
My point is, you don't need to use colors to identify who is speaking, just for the sake of future chapters, and especially if you plan on using multiple colors for different characters in the same chapter; that's even worse on the eyes.
The actual content of the chapter was good though. Look forward to more!
Hum ok you got my attention.
Any updates?
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Dude, I am working on it expect it within the next two weeks.
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Oh sorry but also YAY!!
sorry i was just worried that you stopped
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I had it written out but I decided to take a different direction.
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Oh neat! Thanks for letting me know
I look foward to it!
I just uploaded a new chapter! Please look at it!
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YAY!
Looks good!
And THAT is why i made this folder called "stories waiting to be updated"
WOO ITS BACK!
Quick note
There is no "God" in equestria
So either use Faust, or Celestia
Just helping out
Is Sunset’s dragon companion named Jake or Drake?
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I think those are errors
...OH
I just remembered THAT WAS DERPY IN THERE!
did she...oh no
SHE POISONED DERPY!!!
His or her? Is sunset suddenly genderfluid?
Heh remember to use the same pronouns alright?