Twilight Sparkle is an extremely important pony to you. After ending up in Equestria, she was the one who took you in. She was the one who taught you what friendship can be. She was the one who treated you like an actual person. Over time, the two of you became extremely close. How could you not fall for her? The problem was, you weren't brave enough to let her know that. It took some time to finally build up the courage to tell her how you feel.
But you were a day too late.
Bro stop being so good!!!
First Celestia, then Luna, and now Twilight. Love it.
Dude, this is an absolute masterpiece... You wrote Twilight amazingly well in this one!
Keep up the good work!
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No. Something like this is bound to be released. You know, his inner monster of creativity.
What can I say that others haven't said already?
I loved it.
I wish you good luck and fortune in your next projects.
This is incredible. I can't believe anyone downvoted it.
Will you be doing more stories with Twilight like how you did with the other two princesses?
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That's the plan!
When I asked you in that blog post Runic, about a possible Twilight story in the future I most definitely didn't see this one coming...
Thank you really, this story had everything, and to be honest in this non - mature category one, if not the best I had the opportunity to read and enjoy in the last decade.
A real masterpiece in every possible way, enjoyed it all the way through, so thank you!
Damn it, RunicTreetops. Why is it that itās always your stories that get put into my favorites?
Beautiful. Twilight acted perfectly here.
I like twilight romance should I read this
I'm not crying... *sniffle*
These are tears of manliness! *Sob*
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Wait does anon and twilight get together in the end.
Don't be afraid or put off telling someone you love them. You never know when you'll ever get a chance to tell them again.
Honestly I was hoping for a depressing end I know that a lot of these stories are going to turn out well for everyone but a realistic idea would be him never telling her after what happened
This is an adorable little fic. I like the moral, I like cute!Twilight, and I like the generic-but-relatable Anon.
I do have one down, and itās a common problem I see with writers: Failure to use time correctly. In particular this line: āYou both sit in silence for the better part of five minutesā. What you really meant was āan awkward long timeā. You did not actually mean a real five minutes. Set your phone alarm for five minutes. Now spend the entire time doing nothing but staring at the ceiling in silence. Now imagine that length of time passing between these characters. It doesnāt make sense here. Itās far too long.
Unless precise timekeeping is needed, writers should probably use more generic time phrases, like āa few momentsā, āa very long pauseā, or āwhat felt like an eternityā. Theyāre also more descriptive to what the characters are feeling or thinking.
Sorry, thatās my TED talk. Good story.
Iām tempted to read this mr author man but can I ask? Is this fic sad? Or bittersweet? I donāt feel like sad rn Iām in a good mood
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It's a story about hesitation and regret, but it has a happy ending, I promise!
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Thank you! I will read it
So sweet