Cozy Glow finds herself trapped between worlds, the only way out is to navigate the darkest Abyss in the entire multiverse: Hell. Where she must confront the sins of her past to have any hope of escaping her eternal torment.
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Just a light suggestion change and this is no way negative:
“Still trying to relax on the ferry, I looked up at the skies above, although they still shed their unlight, the ghost-lights above almost looked like stars.”
Just dropping the single stars line at the end gives it more power. I have no other suggestions right now, this was incredibly intense and amazing.
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Good point, I was originally planned on just ending it with the ghost-lights line, the other reference to stars kinda cropped in when I was trying to establish the context around the final line. It was one of those situations where I came up with the line in advance and wrote it down so I wouldn't forget. Thanks