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Badmiral Biscuit
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Badmiral Biscuit
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Like how it's going.
That bunny's gots some HUGE tits...
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Given that Zootopia bunnies retain their legendary breeding rate (as a throwaway joke), she'd need them.
Big-tittied Bunny needs to be violated SOON...
The Internet assures me that Judy Hopps is very accustomed to handling the junk of creatures much larger than her so this should be right up her alley.
Why do you write this article with Party Favor? To be honest, there are so many stud in Kludgetown, do you have to choose Party Favor? 😧😧
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No matter the pony, it is still a horse cook, good for the story, also I think that because Judy size she does not need a big and strong stud, even a more lanky one could be still good for the story and if we take in consideration Hoops cannon personality I think is a good choice to pick a background pony like Party Flavor
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Okay, but Party Favor is really cute. I can't imagine him as depicted in the story😮💨; Happy Humor Festival to you.
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Can't imagine him in what way? Being passed around? Knowing a spell to make his partner happy? Something else?
Also, yeah, he is cute.
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All the better to arrest you with?
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Hundreds of siblings . . . yeah, she'd need 'em.
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No, she needs a consentual canoodle. There's a difference.
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While I didn't go down that rabbit hole (heh), I've been around enough to know that anthro anatomy allows for it. Toss in a little bit of magic, and she's golden.
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Why not Party Favor? What's wrong with him?
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Yes, exactly. Plus, he needs more love, he's a cute stallion.
This is your official review for the Furry Foray Festival Contest!
I've tried to be as objective as possible, but of course there are limits. I've tried to avoid being biased or arbitrary as much as I can, and hopefully I've succeeded at least somewhat. The full, final results will be announced on May 4th, and winners will be contacted shortly afterward to ask how they would like to accept their prizes. When readings these comments, please keep in mind that I know I'm often overly critical -- to the point where I can always find nitpicks even with the greatest works of literature. So don't take anything personally!
Notes:
- Loving the carrot emojis as section breaks!
- Judy seems weirdly calculating in the first chapter... I guess it's in her nature to take her job way too seriously, but she doesn't strike me as quite this analytical about everything.
- And she just lets Capper go after realizing where she is? I get that this is where the plot needs her to go unless she's going to end up with Capper ... but it seems like Judy would be at least a little more dogged in making sure she apprehended her criminal, no matter what. Seems odd that she'd completely forget about him once she knew she was stuck in Equestria.
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She unlocked the door to her room and let him lead her into the room.Kind of awkward repetition there.- Interesting use of magic to make things fit -- usually, authors would just go for making Judy stretchy, but you've done the reverse ... sort of. (And feeling him in the back of her throat is a great detail!)
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been fucked like this.Judy’d given upMissing a space.- I wish the orgasms could have gotten a little more screentime. They tend to be over very quickly. A lot of great buildup, but then it's just suddenly over. (And a lot of the time, it cuts to the next scene before the current scene is really fully finished.)
- Seems like it needs a final chapter to wrap things up. Like ... does she ever get back to Zootopia? Does she manage to bring Capper with her? Or maybe she decides to bring her new pony boy-toy with her instead...
Scores:
Provocativeness: 85
Progression: 85
Payoff: 20
Pacing: 60
Personality: 40
Prose: 65
Total: 355
For more information on what these scores mean, see the scoring rubric.
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Hey so in the warnings it size difference, but how much size?