A lone guard arrives on the eve of Celestia's liberation of the recently enslaved Sire's Hollow in a last ditch effort to save his childhood friend.
If only said friend wasn't the pony that had conquered the town.
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We Always Be Wondercolts Forever. (Big Fluttershy, Rainbow, Sunset and Luna fan).
A lone guard arrives on the eve of Celestia's liberation of the recently enslaved Sire's Hollow in a last ditch effort to save his childhood friend.
If only said friend wasn't the pony that had conquered the town.
Entry for the M/M Shipping Contest!
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This was a fun story, disn't expect to see this shipping, keep it up.
Interesting ship idea. This will be fun!
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Thank you! Glad you enjoyed!
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Glad you like the ship concept! I had to make sure it was an underused idea.
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I did like the tragedy and the fatalism Sombra subjecting himself to, with refusing to contemplate abandoning his goal to overthrow Celestia.
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Thank you!
So let’s see…
-Tragedy
-M/M
-Crackship
I think we’ve found the unicorn of shipfics
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Lol, thank you! I am glad my fic stands out . Hope you enjoyed reading it!
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Oh, don't get me wrong I liked it. Though I will admit I do have one to having one complaint: I you have liked to see a bit more of Sombra's transition into being evil, but that's really my only complaint.
Oh my, that really hurts. It seems that Sombra can’t ever escape his fate if he go on like this. But he chose to do it even though he knew the end will always be the same because he wanted to live and love again. ~Guess I’d rather hurt than feel nothing at all~~~
Anyway, great tale! Two souls bonded together is a very romantic setting, and somehow it hasn’t been overused yet(I think). Nice to see him being able to love even as he eventually embrace fate. I guess he still knows that loving means letting go. That alone shows how much heart he has inside. Too bad the “fate” part can never be free…
You are a writer with some very good potential! Keep it up!
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Ah thank you so much! I've had a draining day so this comment was exactly what I needed to see.
aww that is so adorable! love ponies
aww, and also ominous, given that it is Sombra somehow! and it makes sense for him to form a bond with Soarin’, since Soarin’ is also an outsider here
yay, Flash is in this (not in the best circumstances but still counts!)
aww, child Sombra is quickly becoming the Sombra we know and love here
ehehe love this exchange
and a great take on an Equestrian version of this trope. augh i love this world
ooh i bet this will be a tragically ironic statement later
and oof, love the idea here. it is so true that it would be worse to know Sombra is still very much the Sombra he knew, while still being able to do all this
okay i already love this AU where Soarin’, Sombra, Trixie, and Starlight were all friends in Sire’s Hollow doing stupid teenager things together long before they were world-destroying villains/normal adult ponies
and augh, just loving this dynamic. of course Sombra and Starlight would be the sane ones that enable/restrain their “best friend” halves
classic Trixie moment, love it
and Sombra’s powers being awakened in the act of saving his friends from their own teenage hijinx, augh. that is just wonderful
perfection, love it
love how teenage Soarin’ is already better at this than adult Rainbow Dash
and oof, definitely love the idea of Sombra being reincarnated over the centuries rather than somehow Sombra has returned
ehehe
and oof, this is definitely the Sombra we know and love now. augh, what a great villain!
aww!
ahahaha
a common error!
dang Sombra really just can’t turn it off lol
and oof, at least Starlight had the grace to mind control a village of ponies she didn’t grow up with!
and oof. so Starlight and Trixie stayed behind in the town while Sunburst and Soarin’ went off on their careers?
love the irony here
oh this is fantastic gay panic
augh, exactly why Soarin’ is perfectly chosen for this story
and oof, really love this line. just so fatalist and tragic
and augh, love this shift in perspective of what the difference in Equestrian eras looks like to an immortal and reincarnating being
and augh, this is just so Celestia i love it
what a fantastic AU that you’ve woven! i am in love with this idea of all these characters growing up together in Sire’s Hollow, and the vexing paradox of this Sombra being surrounded by all the love and friendship and goodness he could have asked for, yet turning into the evil king anyway.
and the epic tragedy of the lifetimes-spanning romance was just delectable. thank you so much for it!
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Thank you so much for all the kind words! I really appreciate long comments like this!
I love the pacing and characterisation so far! One tip: use a comma after a quote that's followed by a speaking tag.
So what you wrote as:
should be:
That's the only technical detail I saw consistently out of place. You and your editor did a great job on this. Can't wait to finish it, and I already know it's going to be a favorite!
Beautiful! Very well done. The characters felt very real and true to themselves throughout. I kind of wish we could have seen a bit more of Soarin's reaction to the aftermath, but perhaps it's more fun to leave it open. This AU felt very well put together, and I love what you did with it. Great work!
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Thanks for the advice and great to hear! :D
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Ahhhhhhhhh super late reply but thanks so much!