In the Wasteland, there are two types of creatures, the weak and the strong. To be strong in the Wasteland is a blessing only the goddesses above can grant, it's a eat or be eaten world and I wish to be on top of it. I will fight all who stand in my way of taking my rightful place at the center of Wasteland! Raiders, Steel Rangers, Red Eye's Slavers, the Alicorns. All shall bow to me! For I am Nightseer!
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This is wonderful! Thank you for giving Nightseer some love.
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Thank you, I hope to tell more stories
Ah, Nightseer! Hereafter known as the object lesson to alicorns the world over to avoid goth fashion.
Edit: Also, this is First Person narration, not Second Person.
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there's no second person tag.
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There is on my end; maybe it's a site bug.
Wait, is it allowed to post this conext entries for a second time as standalones?
As for the fic, well, it does not impress me. Maybe too much telling instead of showing, especially at the end. It just says that alicorns do things which is bleak compared to the steel ranger hunt scene, for example.
And the part about attempting to take over the SPP was confusing, did they in canon? Isn't it supposed to be in the middle of an Enclave's military base?
Not speaking about language mistakes such as using "disillusion" (of pegasi ruling the skies) where "illusion" should be. Disillusion is absense of illusion, and illusion is a false belief, right?