Lost in a new world, born in violence can an alien from another world, another universe acclimatize to the idyllic world of Equestria? And perhaps more importantly, can Equestria acclimatize itself to him, and everything his appearance brings upon their world?
Is the doctor's pony form based off of the 12th Doctor? Also, very well written. I look forward to updates
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He's based on the John Hurt War Doctor.
I have to say, this is wonderfully well done. The Doctor is very similar to the show; I daresay you studied other novelisations beforehand.
Ooh no cutie mark doctor. Well met.
Also, "he had" and, "their heads".
This seems out of tense, perhaps rewrite to something like this(?):
This is, of course, just nitpicking. Old habits.
Absolutely love this doctor. No cutie mark, viciously analytical—but still, somehow, humerous—and woefully unprepared for the ridiculousness of what has befallen him. Would love to see more, but take care to read through the day after writing—to catch those really little mistakes.
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Made some changes, thanks for the hand, the tip, and for enjoying.
Shadow? Shadow... Shadow... not a bad villain word, has to be said. The doctor certainly has some experience with shadow creatures (like those in the library) so I can see him feeling confident about this.
Interesting to note the ponies' dislike of the word "military" especially considering the guard should just be a branch of such a thing. Hope he finds his screwdriver soon, even if he can't just go straight back to the TARDIS.
Brilliant again, hope the wait isn't as long this time around!
Ah yes, the room where the officers longue. "lounge"
"whitish pink" and the Inuit is the proper name for Canadian natives. Especially since they don't just live in Canada.
Or so you think...
As an extra, try calling the caps "trapper caps" if you want an easier way to describe them without having to detail every flap and tuft of fur.
Overall, another great chapter. It feels like it ended more out of necessity than a natural point, but I'm sure the next one will clear that worry right up. Sombras back? Brilliant. Is he a timelord in disguise or a lich with crystal phylatories? We'll never know! Loving the way the doctor is being written, and Flurry's legal-loophoole-ing is wonderful.
See you next chapter, friend!
I wonder if he has two hearts.