This is my entry into the: "Gently" Prompt Contest. Thank you everyone at Quills and Sofas Speedwriting For giving me the shove and the support I needed to start writing.
It involves a teenage Rarity who, after having received a black eye during a schoolyard altercation, has decided that a lady should know how to defend herself. Follow her on her first visit to the Ponyville Martial Arts Dojo.
Sweep the leg, Rarity!
Rather cute, and quite believable. Imagining younger Rarity letting loose on that door was quite amusing.
Nice premise for a little vignette. Needs more.
And now we know where Rarity learned her ability in hoof-to-hoof...and how she could defend a boulder named Tom after Discord got to her.
Just run through and squash some typos.
Sweetie Belle with a foal lisp is adorable!
And now, do another one. Perhaps a school fight, where Rarity's ability keeps BOTH of them from getting hurt. I want to know where she got that shiner in the first place.
Go get 'em! Eye of the Tiger!
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Thanks for the comment, yeah I always liked how Rarity seemed to pull kung fu moves when it was most needed.
I'll go through it again on the hunt for said typos, maybe I'll get the inspiration for another story.
Decent story. Here are a few small things to make it better.
safely? deftly? both?
I believe you want "tough".
would