Smooth as Silk

It's been a long time since Fluttershy was afraid to venture into the Everfree Forest. When Rarity needs star spider silk for Twilight's coronation dress, she's happy to help. All it will take is a simple trip into the secluded grove they call home.

Second place in Quills and Sofas Speedwriting's Spookfest contest.

CW: Spiders. Lots of spiders.

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fanreader999999

fanreader999999 #1 · Feb 10th, 2020 · 7 · 5 ·

? Thats it?

Seer

Seer #2 · Feb 10th, 2020 · 5 · ·

Loved this during the contest and love it now too!
It's an interesting kind of horror story, throughout the piece I'd say the tension level is pretty low since it always seems like FS has a handle on the situation. Far from being a detriment, this only serves to make the ending that much better.
The rug pulled from under you effect is very well done, and I'm really glad you added in the bit about the stare too.
Nice work mate!

MlpHero

MlpHero #3 · Feb 10th, 2020 · · ·

Welp, I ain’t goin’ to bed tonight...

StarlightisVERYcute

StarlightisVERYcute #4 · Feb 10th, 2020 · 1 · ·

Spiders don't scare me at all. I think they're cute! So the ending really surprised me.
Well done

Fiddlebottoms

Fiddlebottoms #5 · Feb 10th, 2020 · 2 · 8 ·

If you're afraid of spiders, you're the one in the wrong and need to fix yourself. Even here, too many ponies are traveling into the Everfree at this point and some push back is both right and justified.

I really do like the bluntness of this story. Very old school.

TheLegendaryBillCipher

TheLegendaryBillCipher #6 · Feb 17th, 2020 · · ·

I like what you did with my prompt.

Illi

Illi #7 · Mar 31st, 2020 · · ·

Did Fluttershy die? Did she get eaten?

King of Kings

King of Kings #8 · Apr 18th, 2020 · 2 · 2 ·

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That first sentence needs reworking. Instead of

If you're afraid of spiders, you're the one in the wrong and need to fix yourself.

you probably meant to say If you're afraid of spiders, and kill them because of it, you're the one in the wrong and need to fix yourself. If that isn't what you meant to say, then you're the one in the wrong, since if a person is afraid of spiders then that's their opinion and they have the right to their opinion.

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