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While the Mane Six are away, Ponyville's having its annual fruits and vegetables festival. Doctor Whooves and Derpy are called into action to capture a mysterious creature who's capable of putting the entire event in jeopardy. Whooves is eager to capture the beast, but Derpy sees there's more to the story than meets the crossed eye.

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Just did a quick skim through. The dialogue tagging is a little distracting. It isn't really bad, but could be done a little better with the tagging. Switching to past tense and using said more often would help. Said is an "invisible" word for rraders that we just kind of read over and keeps us more focused on the dialogue rather than what we attach to the dialogue.

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Oof. I've been meaning to fix that. My bad.

... is there an AS in the story ?

As you have requested, here is your review in the group My little Reviews & Feedback

Also you got an upvote for your story:derpytongue2:

"Oh. Well that is rather dreadful, I must say."

:rainbowlaugh: That is amazing... the whole story is!

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