After a shortage of men and women on the battlefield, the President of the United States issues a draft to bring in more people to fight for the nation. When Applejack and Rainbow Dash are drafted, it hits everyone hard. What will happen to two of the beloved Humane 7?
you could have added a little bit more story to the chapter. Just to let the lectors gets in the story, because now its happening too fast.
Not a bad premise, or first chapter. However, having it all be in present tense makes it read more like a game than a story. Perhaps putting future chapters in past tense would make it more story-like?
Aren't the Humane Seven minors? I don't think they'd be able to, you know, get drafted into a war like this. Maybe help out, but definitely not fight.
is this the start of fallout equestria girls in your mind? becuase this would be intresting
7860584 actually no. It's just a war story
7860268 I should have put this in the description but the Humane 7 are up to age.
7860187 Yeah it was kind of a spur of the moment type of thing. I might add to it in the future
oh well either way intresting
7860776 I'm glad you're enjoying it.
Great chapter, keep it up:)
7862749 thank you.
Well I can tell you that it's a great start and hopefully a even better end, I'll be waiting for the next chapter.
7868765 glad you're enjoying it so far
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Awesome as usual! Keep it up!
7903584 glad you're enjoying it so far
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8122851 you have my permission. I can't wait to see the video!
Awesome! I waited so long for this and it didn't disappoint ;)
8123544 glad you enjoyed it
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Is thsi going to end like steel Metal Jacket?
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Full Metal Jacket. And I was wondering if someone was going to catch on to the quotes XD
And I honestly haven't decided how it's going to end.
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Ummm tragicly you did tag that.
WHoaaaaaa. I've been waiting for the next chapter of this for forever and I definitely wasn't disappointed. Lot s of action. Good dialogue. Can't wait for more!
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I'm glad you enjoyed it! Stay tuned for the next chapter!
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Will do, can't wait!
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Nice! Can't wait for more!
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Thanks! Glad you're enjoying it!
I like how you based the drill instructor from Full Metal Jacket. For some reason, I always thought If the mane 6 would join the military, that Rainbow would be a pilot or a scout, and Applejack a Combat Engineer. Twlight a sniper, Rarity spy or intel, while Pinkie and Fluttershy would be medics.
When I read the quotes of the intructor, I had to think of this
The first kill is never easy
I enjoyed it. Didn't understand what the part with the squadleader promoting was about
Nice!!!!
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I was wondering how many people would catch on to the FMJ references. And yeah I can kinda see that too
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Pvt. Joker was promoted to squad leader bc he had the guts to voice his opinion. Something Pvt. Snowball had not done. And thus was given a higher rank
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I saw that famous scene on youtube and reconized it instantly. Did you know the author wrote all lines himself?
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Ah, I understand. For Rainbow Dash, I also thought she would make a good officer, her loyallity making her very caring for those under her command
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Really? They did a damn good job
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I can definately see that as well
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Well, he's on first place on Psychotic Drill Sergeant Characters of watchmojo
With the dialoge, that's from the Top 10 Improvised Movie Moments number 3
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Me too
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He fits the spot for sure. Lol
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Indeed, even the Drill Instructor in half Life opposing Force use some of his lines
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Awesome. Never played Half Life
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Just thought it could interest you