Come Forth, Young Thunder

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mapu

mapu #1 · Jul 4th, 2015 · 5 · ·

This was really great. Awesome work.

PiMan

PiMan #2 · Jul 4th, 2015 · · ·

Even better than the original.

reprovedhawk

reprovedhawk #3 · Jul 5th, 2015 · · ·

If If we If we have If we have to wait another year for another thunderforth story I'll be pissed

Marshal Twilight

Marshal Twilight #4 · Jul 5th, 2015 · · ·

Not bad. Not bad at all.

deadend

deadend #5 · Jul 5th, 2015 · · ·

yummy. if you decide to write another one for this series i'll be looking forward to reading it

Spell 25

Spell 25 #6 · Jul 6th, 2015 · · ·

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I have a vague idea for a third story lurking around the back of my mind. Maybe follow the logical progression of the series? The first featured one pony, the second featured two, so... maybe three for the third? Maybe see how flexible Flitter is?

I dunno. There's nothing definitive, and I can't promise it'd be super-soon. But I still say there are too few autocunnilingus stories on this site. I know of a few stories that feature brief sequences of it, and one that features it in an indirect, off-screen sort of way, but, to my knowledge, mine are the only two which have it as their central feature. And considering how many fetish fics there are on this site, that's something that has to be fixed.

Circumlocution

Circumlocution #7 · Jul 6th, 2015 · · ·

After Young Blossom, I thought you couldn't come up with anything stranger. Well, congratulations. You exceeded my expectations. And, for some insane reason, I liked it.

That said, two typos that I believe I have a moral responsibility to point out:

Finally, his climaxed passed

Accidentally a past tense on "climax" there.

With one finally kiss to his

Obvious enough.

reprovedhawk

reprovedhawk #8 · Jul 7th, 2015 · · ·

6172950 I felt making thunder try blowing himself was a little to cliche. however there is a good story about blossom getting stuck with flitter and cloudchaser and having to go to the hospital. i'm sure you know the one. perhaps working with that author to write that story or tell your own verison of what happened.

EonCrystal