Jesus christ, this stuff is SO MUCH WORSE than I remember.
Ever wonder how I travel through time? How I know how to fight all those monsters out there? How I met my companion, Lyra Heartstrings? Get ready for a whole lot of backstory... My past, my present, here's how it all began with me, the Author.
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What is it with authors and misspelling their titles, these days?
Why is this needed? It adds nothing to the story.
Usually seven year olds aren't worried about what they want to do in life.
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You seriously need work on your pacing. This is just way too fast here. Just a couple of sentences and we're already at what I assume is going to be the 'plot.' Expand upon your ideas, and introduce is to your character first before shit goes down. I mean, at least give us your characters gender and name before anything else!
Too telly. Maybe show us his/her body language or maybe show us their thoughts on the matter to build up some atmosphere surrounding the event.
No shit. You could just say it was a door.
So where's toe Doctor? I'm not a Doctor Who fan, but I'm pretty sure that he's usually with the TARDIS when it lands/crashes down somewhere.
This needs a lot of work in grammar, pacing, tone, and character development.
Not bad but a few mis-spells and a few fillers (or so I see it) It keeps my interest so it gets a like. Just fix the problems and you will be good to go.
5789719 Answers to questions:
1. No one really knows.
2. What about those writers who started writing in their early years?
3. He did give his name, Golden Straw.
4. ...ok, I don't have a rebuttal here.
5. Well, if a strange object you don't know about crashes into your backyard, you wouldn't know what's what.
and 6. Yes, the Doctor has a TARDIS, but there are multiple TARDISes. The Master had a TARDIS, the Rani had a TARDIS, THE TIME LORD HOMEWORLD HAS A MUSEUM DEDICATED TO THEM!
Hope this answers some concerns.