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Flashburn37


Brony since season two started, Male, new to writing. League player... Dnd Player... Geek without the Nerd part(Seriously Computers confuse me)

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Twilight Sparkle looked at a list of spells and spell schools she's mastered, and noticed Spike had crossed out the Enchantment school! She then remembered the want it need it incident and has decided to remaster the school! What could go wrong?

Answer: Everything!!!!!!

A quirky funny tale about meddling in others love affairs, and proof that I should not write these. Or maybe not. Maybe proof I should! Up to you really.

Read if you want a funny trip through an out of control Twilight and a coping Spike, strange references that could be stories of their own, and dumb, dumb humor. Largely clean. But... I like to use the teen label when I reference things like, "Oh this will be so much fun!" She proclaimed.
"Fun?" A muffled voice from a closet let out.
Pinkie ran up to the closet and beat on the door, "You know the rules! Absolute silence or no sunshine for a week!"
So probably not needing the teen label but still. Also some violence later in, but when Macho Pony Randy Stampede is involved it is inevitable.

Chapters (8)
Comments ( 15 )

*reads title*
This is why I don't read ship fics.

woa.

Cool profile picture. Tell me how you got it.
The story was meh, but the because of the profile pic, I give it an 8/8 rlly gr8 m8. :moustache:

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Oh my goodness are you alright!? Wait a second... how could reading a story increase levels of stomach acid to an unfortunate level? What kind of heart burn... Is this a good thing? Or a bad thing? :rainbowderp:

CWA

This reminds me of my story. "Shipping gone too far." -u-

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I'll have to take a look at it! :ajsmug:

I wonder what the dress color will be when Twilight sees Flash Sentry?

Huh. Not sure why all the downvotes, this isn't terrible. Not great but not terrible. I'll give you an upvote to balance you out.

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Ah. well you see the down votes were inevitable, you see, I'm trying to make fun of the fan fic trope of "shipping" by writing one, on a fanfic site. I am literally mocking everyone here. :trollestia: But apart from that the title deters many. They see that and well... it's just meta enough to turn away some people who didn't take Bridal Gossip to heart. Also, it is terrible. (that's the point!) :raritywink:

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you asked for it, *spoiler alert! things are about to become spoiled, they were not refrigerated and thus will now become spoiled!* Ivory, the color that represents instability. :pinkiecrazy:

Twilight got up a stretched her wings

You typed "a" instead of "and".

She looked at a project that Spike and her would likely never finish

"She looked at a project that she and Spike would likely never finish..."
The way to check grammar in a sentence like this is to drop the second person. You wouldn't say "a project her would never finish", would you?

Teleportation, levitation, transfiguration, conjuration, alchemy

Alchemy isn't a spell, or at least not a single spell; it's what Zecora does with potions (among other things).

she botched the want it need it spell

The name of the spell should be in quotation marks.

sent the town in an all out civil war

That "in" would be better replaced with "into".

accidently putting too magic was disastrous

Accidently putting too magic... where? Into the spell? Into the toy? Into the Ponyville water supply?

That's when Twilight got one of those ideas, one of those ideas she really thinks is a bad idea, but she does it anyways.

The shift from past tense to present tense is jarring, and the word is "anyway", not "anyways".

A PARTY INVITATION!!!!!!!!

It's best to avoid use of caps lock, and whatever you do, do not use multiple exclamation points like this, ever.

This isn't the worst I've ever seen, but you would benefit from working with an editor.

The Ship fic sailed the name TITANIC:raritycry::rainbowhuh::raritydespair::fluttershbad::ajsmug::facehoof:

Too bad you sunk the stunt doubles:pinkiehappy::rainbowlaugh::twilightblush::moustache::raritystarry::yay::ajsmug:

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