I am 26 years old, I'm a grown man who loves Sudoku Puzzles!
Button Mash hates taking out the garbage. He would always stay in his room and play his Neightendo or Pega Genesis. But when his mother demands it, he has no choice. Hilarity ensues. Features some popular game characters.
The sex tag is for innuendos. If that's not your thing, sorry.
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Well, it is known that this shit is tight when Egorator's at the mic (bitch)
Idkwtf I just read, BUT IT WAS good.
I'm sorry, I can't resist
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OH MT GAAWWWWWED MNO,...
NO!,....the memories!!!
all my therapy!!!
ITS ALL Coming BACKK!!!
you'll be hearing from my lawyer and getting a bill in the mail.
5047678
5042336 Just changed it to mature!
I knew it! I knew there would be a starbomb reference in there.
I . . . I don't know what to make of this.
5103878 I know right!
Eeyup
Got both references I anticipated.
5120158 Awesome!
*Flashes back to Silent Night Deadly Night 2* Garbage Day!!!!
Sorry, couldn't resist.
5122068 Exactly! (by the way, there's a link to that in the story).
5122255 Oh. Well, it's in the comments now, too!
5122068 Aw, I was going to do that.
5268312
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You can never stop Garbage Day from coming.
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Grammar score out of 10: 7
Pros: FIrst off, and I have to say this: love the Legend Of Zelda reference. Secondly, I have seen some stories revolving around Button Mash, but not really one relating to a simple task like taking the trash out: creative, but simple. More along the story as I read the story, more and more video game reference were present, which is nice. I kinda digged the concept of: Just do it with his mom.
Cons: Just a few, while not bad or cringeworthy, just things you can practice on, and you will be on your way to being a good writer. Firstly, whenever there is action after dialogue, it helps to describe it instead of just saying: he did this or she did that. Show some type of struggle if there's fighting, some effort in doing something strenuous, describe the scene around them, that kind of thing. Also, try to avoid the 'said' portion of characters speaking. These are tricks new writers do and habits old ones need to kick, myself included.
Notes: I would just say this as rule of thumb if you wish to know how good your descriptions of something is: imagine a camera, then put you wish into the scene of the story. Make it vivid, lush, and real. Then simply ask yourself: can the camera see it? If the answer is yes, then you have a pretty good chance to have a good description. If not, then back to the drawing board. Overall, while short was a entertaining read.
6816208 Thank you for that. I might take up on that advice.
Excellent story keep up the good work.
And oh yes I'm a fanfic critic and reviewr. And I help fanfic witers who have witers black