Currently 16, from Georgia, and a aspiring historian/ writer
After of years of patience and work, Rainbow Dash, formerly one of the Elements of Harmony, has joined the ranks of the most prestigious flying team in Equestria: the wonderbolts. Now, after two years of being with them, Dash is now in a relationship with Soarin, and the couple has become one of the most well-known in Equestria.
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Definitely interesting and very good start
I shall happily await more
-DD
4672646 Thank you for your feedback I'll be sure to deliver more to it.
Sweet story!
4673177 thanks.
Dang you work fast
Lovely story my dear
I give it 4/4 hearts
-DD
4673185 hehehehe I know I do. Thanks.
Aww!! How cute I love this story :D
4673436 I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Cute. 4 out of 5 mustaches.
Not bad, I think you did well.
4674649 thanks
I'm not trying to diss your story or anything, keep that in mind. Brace yourself for a rather complicated analysis.
Dash and Soarin are a bit out of character here. I feel like they'd be less mushy with their romance; Dash probably wouldn't be responding with as much fluff as she did- maybe she'd be a little more on the teasing side (based on how she acts in the show). Soarin's general character would probably go along the same lines, seeing as how he's around quite a fiery personality most of the time. Then again, we all have our own headcanon, and if you look at the show the right way, we don't see the main characters for much of their lives. Add that to the fact that presumably Dash isn't seeing much of her friends anymore, and she could very well have a good reason to act fluffy. I feel this possible personality aspect was played a little too over the top, however. (And remember I'm not trying to force your stories a certain way. Please don't get that implication.)
The spelling and grammar was easy enough to read through though (thank Celestia)! Overall, I would recommend an editor next time and/or character personality checks. Unfortunately I had to drop a dislike, but who says you can't improve with each story?
Thank you.
4674829 it's okay, man. Thank you for your constructed criticism, I prefer people to be honest and tell me if something is wrong with the story then lie and say it's good when it's not just to make me feel good. Now, let me address the points you brought up: In the context of the story, no, Dash does not see her friends anymore. in fact the last time she saw them was three years ago. As for the way they behave, well, my guess would be that early on, they were like that, but as time went on, the love they felt for each other grew deeper. Also, I 100 percent agree that every story can be improved on. Thank you for your time
O. MY. GOD. THAT WAS SOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO AWESOME!
although, the chapters and story overall was very short. 4out of 5 scootaloos
4728097 Glad you enjoyed it, and I get that a lot about the chapter lengths. I'll have to see about improving that
6234248 Aww, thank you. That means alot. I'm working on a story with Vinyl at the moment
Nice, sweet story! I like it so far. It's getting late for me but I'll be sure to read the rest of this, later.
Also, I noticed your join date. Welcome to FIMfiction net! I'm always happy to see good writers join the site. Glad to have you with us!
6295623 thanks
Aww this is so sweet and full of fluff