After their short-lived training at Rainbow Falls, Fluttershy and Ditzy Doo get to talking on the way home. Ditzy at first thinks nothing of it, but as time wears on and she sees more of her fellow mare, she can barely think of anything else.
A story that I hope to be ongoing and run for quite a while.
Cute
Write More!!!!! ![:rainbowwild:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/rainbowwild.png)
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This is incredibly cute, but I LOVE that you called her Ditzy! Finally, someone else who prefers it! <3 I'll definitely watch you for this story.
4183067![:pinkiehappy:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/pinkiehappy.png)
Hope you enjoy!
4183084![:rainbowwild:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/rainbowwild.png)
That's the plan!
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Personally I was expecting someone to complain about it by now, but I'm glad to hear I'm not the only one!
Mraw, thank you!
4183147 YAYAYAYAYAAY!!!!!![:yay:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/yay.png)
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(Smiles pipe, nods)
Continue.
This. There needs to be more of it.
As in: now!![:pinkiehappy:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/pinkiehappy.png)
Hm, nice. I have been waiting for that one.
4183229![:rainbowhuh:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/rainbowhuh.png)
How does a space ship smoke a pipe?
4183276![:rainbowwild:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/rainbowwild.png)
Hope to have another chapter out next week, jeez!
4183288![:twilightsmile:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/twilightsmile.png)
Hope I don't disappoint!
I'll take a look at this when there's more to the story, cause I like read for awhile. It looks interesting allready.
Very cute. Can't wait to read more.![:twilightsmile:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/twilightsmile.png)
You got my eye......this pleases me......hmm yes
I have never seen this ship before.
Permission to come aboard, Captain?
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Oh, you might still get a complaint or two, but trust me, you did a good thing by giving the poor pegasus her actual name. <3 <3 I was beginning to think I was the only one willing to write outside of the fan interpretation.
Oh man this is shaping up to be one of the cutest stories I've read so far on FIM. Plus it's a ship that you don't see super often, so it's even more interesting! Probably my favorite part so far is the Ditzy name. I like that much more than derpy.
P.S. Really cute
P.P.S. No seriously.
4183961![:twilightsmile:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/twilightsmile.png)
Fair enough.
4184021![:pinkiehappy:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/pinkiehappy.png)
Can't wait to release more!
4184273![:rainbowhuh:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/rainbowhuh.png)
Why do I imagine you evilly stroking a cat?
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Permission granted! Eyepatch or pegleg?
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Hope I do so well.
I certainly hope to put a new spin on Ditzy, yes. One that's less... well. Ableist.
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Glad you like the name choice, and the story!
Mraw, thank you!
4184511 I got many images... but I was petting my cat at the moment XD
Yus! Ditzy Doo romance story!
Looking forward to reading this one, there is not enough Ditzy Doo fics on this site for my tastes.
4184424![:pinkiesmile:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/pinkiesmile.png)
Not the only one, there are some of us out there.
4184579 There's another one called Address Unknown that's between Twilight and Ditzy you should check that one out it's very good.![:yay:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/yay.png)
Let the lovely dovey begin!![:yay:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/yay.png)
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Which I know you will. It's actually not hard to break away from the popular 'look', just more a matter of writers willing to do it.
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Yeah, you're right. It can be tough to find them, though.
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Yeah, I am pretty certain I have read that one. If it exists, I've probably read it. Well, if it isn't tagged mature, at least...
4184686![:pinkiehappy:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/pinkiehappy.png)
You mentioned your own, but I didn't find it on your profile page. Got a linky? PM me if you don't want to spam LD's page
4184698 It's tagged teen.
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Pm'd you. ^_^
Well now, this looks like it'll turn out to be interesting (and cute). I do like the use of unusual character pairings, and your interpretation of Ditzy's cutie mark was pretty smart. Looking forward to reading more.![:twilightsmile:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/twilightsmile.png)
I DEMAND MOAR![:flutterrage:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/flutterrage.png)
Fluttershy / Ditzy! Yay!![:yay:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/yay.png)
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This is relevant to my interests, and I wish to read moar.
Yes. Yes. Yes.
Yeeessss.
Yeeeeesssssss.
AHHH!!! This is the best thing ever! This has so much potential! I really hope it goes well!
I won't go on long, but even though I am a strong Fluttermac and Derpy Who shipper, I have to say, this ship has lots of potential. I wish you luck.![:coolphoto:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/coolphoto.png)
..... buck it, I'll ship it.![:yay:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/yay.png)
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4184579![:twilightsmile:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/twilightsmile.png)
Personally only seen Ditzy used in this fandom, like, once. So yeah, happy to provide.
4184668![:derpytongue2:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/derpytongue2.png)
Don't worry, we'll get there!
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Thank you! Particularly proud of the cutie mark interpretation, yes. And hope I don't disappoint!
4187818![:rainbowwild:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/rainbowwild.png)
Patience, patience!
4188486
Don't worry, you'll get it!
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Glad you're so excited, though! ![:twilightblush:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/twilightblush.png)
That's pretty high praise.
4189615![:rainbowdetermined2:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/rainbowdetermined2.png)
Thank you, sir!
4189648![:pinkiecrazy:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/pinkiecrazy.png)
Another comes to the fold
4189807 actually there is a story i know of done by ciroton. an older one where it has ditzy depicted as highly itnelligent and capable, yet whatever wiring for her capacity for speech all over the place; basically she speaks in word salad.
4189807 Why does everyone think I'm a dude!?!?!?!![:raritydespair:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/raritydespair.png)
4190923![:duck:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/duck.png)
That... actually sounds really interesting.
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Bad assumption; I'll try not to let it happen again. ![:twilightsheepish:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/twilightsheepish.png)
Oh, um... sorry, ma'am.
4192808 look up ciroton and go to his dev art page, as he does not have it on fimfic.
also a story of how she gets dinky and her struggle to keep her is in there too.
Well it is interesting for a start to use her eyes as a misinterpretation of her capacities and the way you use her cutie mark is nice too. I think it would be nice to have some more description, not necessarily from their environment but from their feelings, you know to give them more depth. The dialogues are fine, but without some background information, it kind of seems a little bit rush. For exemple, we see that Ditzy (thanks for using this name and not Derpy by the way) thinks that Fluttershy is cute and at the end of the chapter, it seems to suggest that she thinks it in a romantic way. Where does it come from ? What reasoning lead her to his conclusion ? etc...
Otherwise, I think it is nice and has some potential. I shall see the rest, we the free people of Unicornia asks for more on this shipping !![:trixieshiftright:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/trixieshiftright.png)
Next chappy: Let the D'awwness commence! >:D NONE SHALL SURVIVE THE CUTENESS!![:pinkiecrazy:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/pinkiecrazy.png)
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That sure was really sweet and heart warming to read... I can't wait for the next chapter. Thank you so much for writing it.
this looks to be highly entertaining, eagerly awaiting more.
yeah. definitely a fun read so far.
flutters is stupidly cute,and i like the straightforward derpy you write.
good stuff so far.
Very cute.
I help but wonder if Bulk Biceps's kid is Scootaloo.
Dr.Whooves. WHERE THE DOCTOR!![:fluttercry:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/fluttercry.png)
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The first bit got me interested, but the second bit... notsumuch. The dialogue here was awful. As a thing? Terrible.
It is rushed at best, and lazy at worst. I'm sorry, but I'm going to have to reclaim my star. Always remember the characters you're writing. OC's could get away with it, sure, but when you're giving voice to characters that have set personalities you have to write around them - FOR them. You can't just name a character the same and call it good.
4253789![:twilightsmile:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/twilightsmile.png)
Thank you!
4253868![:duck:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/duck.png)
Hm... that would make for an interesting story.
4253916![:trollestia:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/trollestia.png)
Right here!
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He's kinda under the weather at the moment, though.
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Two, no, Ditzy doesn't really have much of a personality besides being clumsy and a bit awkward. She's had almost no lines and is barely even used in the show. Unless you're talking about the fanon personality, which is ableist as hell and I'm intentionally contradicting. Either way, I'm going to have to disagree quite vehemently. ![:ajbemused:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/ajbemused.png)
Okay, two things: One, how was the dialogue bad? At least give me an example or two and how to fix it if you're going to be this, quite frankly, rude.
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Fluttershy tilted her head. “That… doesn’t make sense, though.”
Wasn't talking about Derpy. There is no acknowledgement of her reaction or anything that might relate to Fluttershy being so bold in a conversation. I forgave it on the train, because you were setting up a story - not the easiest thing to do. Buuuut Fluttershy suddenly being completely open about all the things that scare her to somepony she doesn't really know? Mmmm... yup.
I will give you this: The dialogue rushes the story, but if you slowed it down you would have magic.
I'm so glad that there's more of this! I want it to never end.
The true genius of this story is that, before reading it, I'd never considered Derpy/Fluttershy, but now, it totally makes sense. ![:pinkiehappy:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/pinkiehappy.png)
Also, for whatever it's worth, I thought the dialogue was pretty good. Nothing struck me as being particularly OoC.
4254053![:unsuresweetie:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/unsuresweetie.png)
There are multiple reasons I still disagree with your assessment, but I really don't want to start an argument. It's just a story, nothing to get riled up over.
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And thank you; dialogue and character interaction is normally my forte, so I try to provide consistent quality. ![:twilightsheepish:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/twilightsheepish.png)
Glad you enjoyed it, and glad you like the pairing so much!
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Fair enough, Captain!
As long as there are people finding enjoyment, we'll call it close enough.![:twilightsmile:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/twilightsmile.png)
I wonder if Dinky will like Fluttershy. That could make or break the deal.
I don't care what anyone says I think your characterization was fine. Some people are just overly critical.
I probably wouldn't have been as nice as you.![:trixieshiftright:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/trixieshiftright.png)