Based in MadMaxtheBlack's Your Human and You setting, a human brought to Equestria spends 5 years as a pit fighter before being 'rescued' by Cadence, begins some time before the events of Season 1.
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Well that confirms things that i had thought.
Interesting how they are trying to manipulate him, but still have no idea how deep the rabbit hole goes.
Ah man I can't WAIT for the next side chapter to show up. You are AWESOME!
Do you like... bananas?
I love how Percy screws over everything the ponies believe about human behavior.
When did he grow one of those?
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Mile Stone is actually a human in disguise. Didn't you notice? Silly.
You know, I really like how you portraying neither side knowing the full story.
I'm waiting for a "you are the weakest link" declaration from Percy to somepony...
4125693 well I know wher that unicorn can go bannasrainbowlaugh:
Chapter 10, pls?
I've been wondering, why did the game machine explode? Did stressing it overload it somehow?
Here's a list of unusual words which Dan_s Comments used in this chapter (3s) which broke my immersion of the story when I had to go Google them. You may find this useful if I speed up the process for you:
Sagacious: having or showing keen mental discernment and good judgment; shrewd.
Well, that certainly throws everything in later chapters into a different light. "Oh, yes, we figured out that you're intelligent early on. We just wanted to play along with your charade!"
4129920 but they don't now how intelligent he is.
well this puts an intrugent new spin on the entire tale. Although when the chips are finally down and Percy reveals himself Celestia, Cadence and Shining will still be the ones left speechless, not the other way around. It's interesting that neither Celestia's nor Cadence's "passive magic" seem to have an effect on him.
Some minor typos:
4128759 It was Tic Tac Toe and Percy created a situation where the machine had two possible choices to see what it did. That's why he lost so much. The machine didn't know how to make a decision and overheated.
4153740 Unless I'm mistaken, getting the upper left and lower left corners in the first two moves as player 1 is an guaranteed win. If Percy is player 1 and can't switch to player 2, how can he maneuver the computer into creating such a situation?
So, I'm about halfway through chapter 3 'the other side' and I've noticed something interesting. In every 'other side' chapter you change a lot of details here and there as to what happened from Percy's POV. It's quite annoying.
Also, there times in this story where I barely know what is going on, or what it is that Percy is thinking, or sometimes what he's thinking has no relevance to anything. For instance, the 'chess' game. It could have just been me not following, but it was still a bit confusing.
Another thing, you haven't described what Percy himself looks like. I know some people (me being one) like to know those details just because it's nice to have sometimes. It also makes it easier to picture the character in the scene.
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Heh. Different people will ALWAYS tell the same story differently. Only in a "perfect" world do all the stories match perfectly. Not even in the New Testament do the four accounts agree on what was said and when.
Really digging the duality of this story. Normally we'd get everyone's perception at once or just leave things implied, but this is pretty good, too.