About newly published novel (ToM: Mending Shards). Minor spoilers! · 11:14pm Nov 21st, 2021
Overall, it's imperfect. For the first three chapters I simply did not know in the slightest how the plot will unfold. It shows. I just tried to see and show some semi-related pictures. These chapters are later on somewhat tied to the plot, but actual plot starts from chapter 4, and, thankfully, after that I never lose it.
There are holes. Things that, should I happen to have more battery in me, are actually in need to be spoken out and shown rather than noted in passing.
The tone of the story and the setting is creepy. Eternal night is eternal night. The night so long that the very word 'night' is not known. There is danger, and it is a part of life through generations; the idea of danger being not there is... almost non-existent.
The ponies there are ponies... except there is a very significant cultural change that permeates through all the world and their interactions between each other. I tried my best to show it, with some consequences of it, so not a word on it here.
It is imperfect.
It is finished now.
I am happy that I have it written.
I will be very glad if anyone of you would be able to read it through. Optionally, with a line or two thrown back at me.
