I Edited Gray Rainbow... Again

Yes, yes, I know, "BronyDerp! Stahp freakin' editing the damn thing and making me re-read it!" Sorry D:
But I came up with an idea that made the story a lot more original. The original idea was "yadda yadda sad shit ends up happy w00t." But I've edited it, something that makes you go: "Wait, what?" I'm hoping this makes it better—I think it does. You'll notice changes in both chapters that are published right now. So, now that I actually know what the hell I'm doing, I'll be writing. :P