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Twilight Sparkle and her closest friends have been tasked with planning the class senior trip over spring break. They are going on a cruise! Twilight happily took the lead to plan most of the activities and accommodations, but additional input is always welcomed. This is the last meeting before the vacation begins!

Written for Perfectly Insane's dialogue only story contest. Found here.

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Are we going to get a sequel showing what happens during the actual vacation?

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I can't tell if this is a joke comment or not

Ohh the lady doth protest to much..

“No F-Bombs! You’ll ruin our Y7 rating!”

Pinkie, you may be an Y7 show, but this is a site with mature filters, not TV.

I think you need to work on who says what, cause I didn't have a clue who was saying what.

There will be other guests on the ship besides just our classmates and in all honesty the idea of being on a cruise is to get away from your everyday and have fun and relax… which for us would include unexpected magical mishaps be they from creatures or artifacts.

Mishaps from enchantments are much rarer for the Rainbooms, much less planeswalkers and battles. :derpytongue2:

The bit with the Trixie fistbump is a bit hard to follow in terms of who's saying what, but overall, you pulled this off with aplomb. Nice work, and best of luck in the judging.

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It's on YouTube. Original cast and a hentai plant monster.

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Yeeeeeah.

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Hehehehe!

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Shhhh, this version doesn't know that. Who knows what might happen.

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I'm sorry you had difficulty. I suggest reading it again and see if that helps.

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Thank you. I gave it a shot and this is what I came up with. (Pssst. Love your work.)

I got lost amongst the characters. I honestly had no clue Rarity wasn’t actually present until it was mentioned Rarity just arrived. It was funny though.

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