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Ok thanks for the help

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Hi YEVG, I just had a chat with Blaze-Saber about the Chaquetrix story you two are working on and Blaze wanted me to just let you know what I had suggested to him so I'll write it all in this one message.

Firstly... It was quite rushed with how tightly packed the events and information were happening and being shown at the same time, it would be best to take your time and flesh out each paragraph before continuing on the ensure a coherent timeline of events through each chapter.

Next, it would probably be a good idea to have Attea be introduced in chapter three after Flash and the others get used to the Chaquetrix and how sexually attracted the transformations themselves are to Flash, Flash and the main group only learning of the Chaquetrix reproduction function in the same chapter they meet Attea.

Other than those two issues, it's going great so far with the tour and using the Ben 10 timeline in the Equestria girls universe, though it would probably be best to have the introduction be a two parter, the first part being a short prologue showing the space scene where the Chaquetrix is sent to earth, and then the real chapter 1 would be starting within the bus/van Flash, the main seven, and principle Celestia are using for the tour.

Just make sure the paragraphs are properly spaced so people don't accidentally skip over important details in a certain scene and you will be just fine.

Anyways have a great day.

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Your welcome

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Yes I know but thank you anyway.

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Hey, it just got moved to FanFiction.Net